i've damaged my fingers over you.

I think this poem is missing something but I can't quite figure out what it is so therefore I can't add it. Please help me if you can!

you know,
i've damaged my fingers over you.
bent over a wooden fret board
watching as my fingers paint songs
that i can never let you hear.

overrated repetitive vague cliche.
the same things you have heard for years.

until now,
when i tend to attract the guy
with the better guitar
and the better complexion
who knows i've never been kissed
yet, leaves it alone.

until now,
he says
"i love you,"
i have to turn away, because
i dont know what that means.

I don't know. I think it lacks the specific thing that is giving you all of this confusion. I liked the part *watching as my fingers paint songs*

I liked the first stanza, and the last stanza. But to me, each section sounded like it belonged in an entire different poem than all the others.

they're repetitive
they're vague
they're cliche
they're overrated
they're the same things
i know you've heard them for years.

That was pathetic and you know it.

The "until now"s were misplaced, had no real purpose other than to confuse the whole poem. Although I like the idea of an "until now" in this poem.

I liked the ending, with the "until now" replaced the way it is in my head.

Incandescence wrote:

they're repetitive
they're vague
they're cliche
they're overrated
they're the same things
i know you've heard them for years.

That was pathetic and you know it.

The "until now"s were misplaced, had no real purpose other than to confuse the whole poem. Although I like the idea of an "until now" in this poem.

I liked the ending, with the "until now" replaced the way it is in my head.

Okay I took your advice on all the "they're"s. Is that any better?