I like it, but the first stanza just seems not as useful as the others, and almost looks like it doesn't even need to be there. It seemed a little cliche by your standards, even the last line sounded like someone else could of wrote it - I don't know, it just seems like anybody's poem to me.
Nate wrote:And if YWS ever does become a company, Jack will be the President of European Operations. In fact, I'm just going to call him that anyways.
Yes, I would have to agree with Jack...the beginning and the end kind of threw things off. However, I know your poems by the way you write and well, the middle gave it all away.
Anyway, about the poem. Well um, the bold got on my nerves. It might have something to do with me hating bold verdana font...okay okay I shouldn't judge a poem by it's font style but I can't help it. I thought it was a great poem, though. It wasn't uber cliche like it seemed like it was going to be by reading the first stanza. However, I can't relate to anything about kissing or loving except having the lack of it. So yeah, that part was a little irritating as it always is...and by the way, is this another poem about Grant, my dear? [/grrrr].
