Ticket to the Great Perhaps

you dont understand
there is so much that you dont see
just think if you can
what growing up had to be like for me
one days its over here
next its some where else
with only my teady bear near
loud voices
stupid choices
do you think they ever thought of me?
living in the shadow of the night
the pain, the pain.
the center of the chain

can you see now? no?
the voices got louder
now he makes an angry sound
i watched from my bedroom door
when her head hit the
kitchen floor
with only my teady bear near
I got through the
loud voices
stupid choices
do u think he thinks of her?
living in the shadow of doubt
the pain, the pain.
the center of the chain.

do you understand?
the reasons why I cant even trust myself.
the door is closed on
the feelings i keep inside
with only my teady bear by my side
i got through the pain.
just a little hug then i was fine
because of the
loud voices
stupid choices
they never even thought of me
the pain (lingering) the pain (lingering)
the-center-of-the-chain

with only my teady bear near
I got through the
loud voices
and the
stupid choices
I always think of them
the pain, the pain
the center of the chain
the center of the......

I liked this peom, but i think your description "bleh"s a bit offputting lol. It needs work with capitals and commas but i realy liked it!

next its some where else

with only my teady bear near

loud voices

stupid choices

I really liked this, it made me want to read more

the pain, the pain.

the center of the chain

Again great




when her head hit the

kitchen floor


I think the words need to be rearanged a bit, it didnt really flow that well here

with only my teady bear near

I got through the

loud voices

and the

stupid choices

I always think of them

the pain, the pain

the center of the chain

the center of the......

Its nice how you repeat these lines, it makes the reader remember, but i didnt really like the last line much, i kept thinking "does it carry on on the next page?"
Great poem! loved it

gracey