Untouched ch 14

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hapter Fourteen
For the next few weeks, I went back and forth between Jasper and Damien. Jasper really did want this, even though he would become a monster. He kept asking me if I would still love him when he’s different. My answer was always the same. Yes.
Damien had to tell me all of his secrets so that I could pass them on to Jasper. By the time they had everything figured out, my father was going away again. I was extremely exhausted.
My father was leaving during the night that Friday and we planned to have Damien come over when Bailey went to sleep. You could literally taste the anticipation in the air. Jasper was so distracted; he started changing the temperature in the house during the day. One minute it was hot, the next it was freezing cold. I had to take my sweatshirt off, only to put it back on two seconds later.
I couldn’t concentrate on my homework once the sun went down. Jasper didn’t come in my room at first that night. I walked over to my bed and sat down with a sorrowful sigh. Tonight could be one of my last nights with Jasper, and he was no where to be found.
I know I could call him, but, maybe he’s preparing himself. I don’t know how this stuff works.
I could feel my hands getting shaky as I tried to focus on breathing. I closed my eyes and started counting.
Behind me, in the smallest movement I almost missed, someone shifted. I gasped and turned around. “Oh.”
There he was, looking like the angel that I knew he wasn’t. His blond hair was curly that day instead of his normal straight hair. His eyes were darker like his pupils were dilated.
He smiled as he took in my expression. “Hey, Damien,” I sighed.
“Genna,” he said, suddenly serious. “I can’t go through with this.”
My heart skipped a beat, which I think he heard. His lips twitched into a grin. “Would you let me finish!” He smirked. “My uncle, Sebastian, however is willing to help out. He is much older than I am and is willing to take in a new companion. Basically, Jasper will be taking my place.”
He shifted on the bed again so that he was sitting cross-legged. He was fingering my purple faded comforter. “I am old enough now to go out on me own. I shouldn’t have any problems. This little birdie is leaving the nest, after I graduate of course.”
“Naturally,” I agreed.
I laid across the foot of the bed and sighed. He seemed so casual with everything. He automatically shrugged this off as if it happens all the time, as if this was the natural order of things in his life. It didn’t make much sense to me, his world. There was so much I didn’t know, and was too scared to ask.
Things like: Does he kill humans for food? How do you turn another? Does it hurt? Do you sleep at night—since he’s obviously out during the day—Do vampires have enemies? Do they have hypnotic powers?
I cringed away from those questions and came back to reality. During my little daze, Jasper had appeared, but was talking with Damien quietly.
They hadn’t even noticed I was there.
Jasper was pacing back and forth in front of my bed. He had one hand under his chin. His brown hair was all messy, like he just woke up. His eyebrows furrowed together casting a shadow over his eyes. He looked deep in thought.
Damien had moved to the edge of my bed. He didn’t seem as comfortable as he did before. He watched Jasper. His expression was part awe and part expecting. My guess was that he was expecting Jasper to attack him. Damien’s eyes were wide as they watched Jasper.
“Does he know everything?” Jasper asked. His voice was harsh and he spoke between clenched teeth.
Damien didn’t move as he spoke. “Sebastian knows every detail. He wasn’t happy of course, but he hardly ever is.” He almost smirked at the thought of his uncle’s unhappiness.
“Nigel,” Jasper snapped. I jumped at the name surprised. To me, he is Damien. “This may not end with rainbows and butterflies. Nothing like this has ever happened before.”
Jasper stopped in front of Damien and inclined his body towards him.
They were still oblivious of my presence and I felt left out. I shifted my legs. They didn’t notice.
“I know that, Jazz. Sebastian has seen a lot more of the world than I have. He will know what to do.” He paused for a moment before starting again. “This is new to us but he has been preparing all night. This will go down without a hitch. There is nothing to worry about,” he said with confidence.
Jasper’s eyes flickered to mine. They were dark that day, cold. However, when he looked at me his expression softened. Then I was looking at air. He had disappeared. My heart raced in panic as I scanned my room for him.
I sighed with relief when his arms, cool as they were, wrapped around me from behind. He softly kissed my neck, oblivious to our small audience.
I glanced up at Damien. He was staring at us with his lips turned to a frown. “She isn’t Sue,” he said in a stern voice.
I froze. The last few weeks I had completely forgotten how the love of my life could be so fickle. I had forgotten about my great aunt, Sue.
I flashed back to the second time we met in his sitting room. How he wrapped his arms around me, and how it felt so right. Except now, I felt like the rebound girl. I wasn’t his first love; he still loved Sue until I came along. I took her place.
Jasper ran his nose along the line of my neck and I shivered awkwardly. “Nigel, could you give us a moment?” Jasper said into my neck. I knew Damien heard.
He scoffed and headed for the window. When he stepped onto the ledge, I jumped to my feet. “Stop!” I screamed, but he was already gone. I sprinted to the window and looked down. There as no mangled body on my front lawn.
I turned back to my bed where I left Jasper. He stared at me; his face seemed peaceful and sweet. Like all of our problems left when Damien jumped out the window.
Last edited by jasmine12 on Sat Oct 11, 2008 3:50 pm, edited 2 times in total.
"Sometimes the worst bad guy makes the best good guy." Nigel--Untouched




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Hey, jasmine!

Here I am again, reading your unbelievably good story. I know, I dont' have a life on the weekends either lol :wink:

My name was scrawled in the middle in the perfect penmanship that would make my handwriting look like chicken scratch.


Uh oh, Twilight alert. This is WAY too much like what Bella would say. Sorry, Jasmine, because I hate when people relate my story to Twilight as well, but you really can't say this. Didn't Bella say this exact thing once? I don't know, I just suggest a complete rewrite of this sentence. Sorry :?

I am watching you sleep as I write. There is nothing more wondrous than watching the love of my life dream sweet dreams. I have learned so much about you when you sleep. You speak so clearly, it’s hard to tell if you are really sleeping. By what you say, I’d guess you dream about me and the stories you’ve been told about my past. You say that you love me. You say that the most.


Another Twilight alert. Gosh, jasmine, I feel horrible but you just can't have the "love talking in your sleep" thing. Try to keep this but just don't have that in this letter.

My hand shook since the very first line. I reread the last line repeatedly in my head. He never intended to come back to me. Jasper was leaving me forever.


Wow, how can Jasper do this!? Just ditch when the going gets tough. Gosh, I really dont' like him right now...Grr...

This was so good, Jasmine! I think this chapter is my fav so far! The emotions rolling off of this thread was amazing. You did so well! I just can't praise you enough! :D

I hope my mentions about Twilight didn't offend you. I just don't want people to think this is another vamp story cause it's not! I just can't get enough of it!

Wish you luck with future threads! :D
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dude, that not nice.

jasper left her....why did he do that? i understand that he does want to hurt but there's no reason why he should stay away forever. Let me know when you posted the next chapter please.
"I love you," she whispered in his ear, before taking his mouth with her own.

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