Someone at my window

Unsure about this poem but please review.

There's someone at my window,
calling out my name,
I really wish I knew her,
I turn around in shame.
It's like I couldn't help her,
or bring her in the door,
yet I can hear her calling,
much louder than before.

it is so nice but try to right a longer one next time ok and make it more realistic em.... i think that's it so wish you luck for the next poem you right (i hope you will) ok

i think the length is perfect.
the poems rhyme is very good , the point is well brought across and the rhythm is good.
i just think that perhaps you might need a little more story element occasionally. However, i dont think its all that necessary in this case
good work

bisquit

The rhythm is excellent and the rhymes are wonderful. Try to expand it a bit and let us know more about what's going on. For what is there, it's great

aye, it's v. catchy. Good rhyming, however.. why don't you expand? Like, who is that girl, why is she calling the person if the person themselves doesn't know them. Maybe it's just me, but comma use may be a bit excessive. Put some periods in, but.. other than that, no grammar errs did I see, nor spelling. Kudos. Keeping writing maybe make a sequel?

This poem is really catchy! I love the rhythm and the way the poem just works & I understand what you mean but I think you should expand it a bit more. Loved it, though