ConquesT

like poison i slowly engulf you,
your urge to resist is now gone,
addicted to me you are,
mesmerized you shall stay,
you are my conquest,
perhaps you’re more?
time will tell;
if we
fail..

it's great good rhyming and a little bit catchy But great poem i hope you will continue to wright poems



good luck

So you're trying to go 9-8-7...and so-on with the syllables, right? Awesome!

Period at the end of the first line. Period at the end of the second line. And periods after the third and fourth lines Each of those is a complete sentence; putting commas makes comma splices. Also, capitalise each word in the beginning of each line if you want to follow the correct - I laugh at that word, though - poetry guidelines, or leave them lowercased to have a shy, "backing away," feel to it.

Other than the minor punctuation mishaps, this was great. Looking forward to seeing your other works.