disseat

For the first time
in a while I smiled today
A warm glimmer of hope ran through me
How I wished you could've seen it

But how little did I know
it would be my very last smile
For I did not see
the past becoming my future

Once again disseat rules my life
lies uncovered from the shadows
I lay broken upon the floor
been pushed to far one final time

I wanted to say goodbye but you were with her.

Wrote it in 5 mins nothing good...

not good? if this isnt good nothing ive ever read is! this is a beautiful poem and it almost made me smile...something i dont do authentically very often...it wasnt sad and i liked it...i usually dont like poetry that isnt sad and depressing but this one made me happy aunthentically and i cant help but say,
I LOVE IT!

this is really good. captured the reader instantly and held many features that are really succesful. including...

'For the first time

in a while I smiled today'

this is a really good opening and instantly draws you in. i think you could even add a semi colon after the word 'today'

just a few more bits of punctuation might make this piece even better. But as it is, i adored it
great work

Wow. For a poem written in only 5 minutes, it was really amazing!
Yes, I agree, punctuation will make it better.

Other than that, though it was simple, it was really good.

Keep writing!