The second paragraph has two run-on sentences. You can easily separate both of them into two, and it should make more sense that way.
Same as above for the third paragraph, but only one.
Same as above for fourth paragraph, but only one.
"food on fire escapes for strays was harder than you’d think." This makes me think that the food for alley cats is hard. Did you mean that it's harder to find?
Other than these gripes, this both fascinated and confused me. What is meant by cataract, symbolically? Pretty interesting.
Anyway, good job, and happy writing! =3
"I think it goes until it's done." "Don't we all."
Fragments done on purpose, for the style but... I did mean to change that bit about the food. I'd noticed it before. Strangely, I got a compliment saying it was one of the better lines.
I think I'll change it.
I want to shake off the dust of this one-horse town. I want to explore the world. I want to watch TV in a different time zone. I want to visit strange, exotic malls...I want to live, Marge! Won't you let me live? — Homer Simpson
