Heartbeat

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The descriptions went very nicely with the theme. It was short, but I can tell that a lot of personal memory and feeling went into it.

The "thumpthumpthumpthump" made it somewhat humorous. I think this is a poem anyone can read and smile at.

And anyone who doesn't smile at it is a heartless monster!

Just kidding.

Good job, anyways!

I enjoyed the overall flow of the poem, and the imagery and themes were well integrated.

200397 wrote:In the color red there is
passion, there is love.
In red there is a
heartbeat.

Repetition was used nicely (in reference to "there" in the quoted stanza), but I was really hoping for some forms of rhyming in the poem. Even ambiguous use of assonance would have made it sound a bit more complex and lyrical.

Though, it was good regardless.

I really liked it, it was so different from the normal things where "red = blood and red = hate blah blah blah"
I think you described the colour red in a totaly differnt way from that
which i like becuase different is always so much more exciting
keep writing cant wait to read more!