I never told you I loved you

I really liked this one, the shortness doesn't take away from the poem either. I really like this part:

xGraceex wrote:Then I slip
Then I fall

Then I scream
Then I soar

"I'm flying, Jake!" I cry
"I'm flying!"

Then I hit the ground
The sun sets, the sky darkens
And Jake is weeping
into my blood soaked hair

It just hits you because you're happy because she feels like she is flying, then she falls and she realizes that she is not as perfect as she seems. Really great job! Keep writing!

i like this one a lot more than your other pieces. i'm not even sure there's a specific reason why. it's just a tragic story told well. you've proved yourself a real poet by writing this piece. superb job. keep it up.
-zalarus