Suicidal heroes 1 Prologue

100xstupid wrote:Prologue

When the child was born, it already knew how to use its powers. It had been born into an average middle class I always thought that was one word "middleclass" family who were wonderfully content with life. The husband had recently been promoted, and the couple were moving into a new house. They were swimming in joy with their baby, but soon they would be terrified of it. Up until this last sentence you didn't hook me. I was going to say you needed a hook (in my opinion), but you just did. good timing. And... I'd hit ENTER right about now. When they went home with it "it" being the baby? Then I'd say that. "It" just doesn't seem to fit here. Sorry , strange things began to occur. I'd rather you just show us the strange things instead of first telling Whenever the child was brought into a room, the lights would get brighter, and sometimes the couple could swear somebody turned up central heating every time it cried. Enter here? They knew that it was hard to be parents, but not this hard. When ever "whenever" = one word. they called a babysitter just once You could cut that underlined part. It isn't needed , the unfortunate person would since you said "just once", that means it was only one babysitter, so then this should be "unfortunate person was". Right? be busy every other time the parents wanted to enjoy themselves. Enter? The father began to stay at work for hours of overtime that he didn’t need to do, and the mothers’ hairdressing appointments were eternal. It wasn’t until a year and a half later that these odd things became undeniable. The T.V would flicker on and off on itself, and objects would fall off tables, or sometimes disappear all together, only to be found on another floor being cuddled by the child… They were scared to look at it in fear of it. Perhaps if they had shown more love and understanding, they might have survived… The baby was three when he became an orphan. The powers it had finally went out of control, and the house was burnt to the ground. They said it was a miracle that the baby survived, though nobody knew how it escaped…

The solar system works because of gravity, holding everything together like a jigsaw puzzle. It works perfectly to keep each planet safe from the void of distant space. But when another object, as large as a planet, enters this puzzle, the entire picture is rearranged, even destroyed. Out in space, there was an enormous mass of iron, almost pure iron. It had been tossed like a boomerang, coasting space by the pull of gravity all around it. Finally, it was caught within the field our sun. The colossal mass was heading towards the sun, slowly, very slowly, but still on the way. When it drew near to the sun, there was one planet stood between it, a planet that would be destroyed. The planet was known by its’ inhabitants as Earth.

100xstupid wrote:Prologue

When the child was born, it already knew how to use its powers. It had been born into an average middle class I always thought that was one word "middleclass" family who were wonderfully content with life. The husband had recently been promoted, and the couple were moving into a new house. They were swimming in joy with their baby, but soon they would be terrified of it. Up until this last sentence you didn't hook me. I was going to say you needed a hook (in my opinion), but you just did. good timing. And... I'd hit ENTER right about now. When they went home with it "it" being the baby? Then I'd say that. "It" just doesn't seem to fit here. Sorry , strange things began to occur. I'd rather you just show us the strange things instead of first telling Whenever the child was brought into a room, the lights would get brighter, and sometimes the couple could swear somebody turned up central heating every time it cried. Enter here? They knew that it was hard to be parents, but not this hard. When ever "whenever" = one word. they called a babysitter just once You could cut that underlined part. It isn't needed , the unfortunate person would since you said "just once", that means it was only one babysitter, so then this should be "unfortunate person was". Right? be busy every other time the parents wanted to enjoy themselves. Enter? The father began to stay at work for hours of overtime that he didn’t need to do, and the mothers’ hairdressing appointments were eternal. It wasn’t until a year and a half later that these odd things became undeniable. The T.V would flicker on and off on itself, and objects would fall off tables, or sometimes disappear all together, only to be found on another floor being cuddled by the child… They were scared to look at it in fear of it. Perhaps if they had shown more love and understanding, they might have survived… The baby was three when he became an orphan. The powers it had finally went out of control, and the house was burnt to the ground. They said it was a miracle that the baby survived, though nobody knew how it escaped…

The solar system works because of gravity, holding everything together like a jigsaw puzzle. It works perfectly to keep each planet safe from the void of distant space. But when another object, as large as a planet, enters this puzzle, the entire picture is rearranged, even destroyed. Out in space, there was an enormous mass of iron, almost pure iron. It had been tossed like a boomerang, coasting space by the pull of gravity all around it. Finally, it was caught within the field our sun. The colossal mass was heading towards the sun, slowly, very slowly, but still on the way. When it drew near to the sun, there was one planet stood between it, a planet that would be destroyed. The planet was known by its’ inhabitants as Earth.