To Be Loved

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To Be Loved

To be loved, when mean the world, more than life itself
If only to know I meant something
If only to feel the warmth of another’s soul
To hear the rhythm of their heart
To feel the lifting of their chest
To be loved, would fight away the darkness building inside of me
For them to be the shelter that hides me
From the pouring tears
To be there when it seems no one hears
My distant pleads, my shallow screams
To be loved, would melt my numb soul, thaw my icy fingers
To warm my dying heart
If only from the start, If only we’d never part
It would be the greatest gift, to know your here
Just for me
Just to see my smile, to be worth while.
To be loved, would be like the sun before the snow, the scent before the rain
The sweet honey, the sweet sugar cane
To be with you, to give my love to one
To stand by your side, Wide eyed and unafraid
To see the light among the dark and erase the wounds that crutch my soul
To be loved, I wish I knew how, I wish I could feel something other than this emptiness
I want to be loved I long to be held, I need to know you’ll never leave
But it’s me that can’t, It’s me that won’t.
You’ll be here, always waiting, anticipating. Watching over me.
But it’s me, it was never you.
I won’t be loved, I won’t be heard.
Without a voice, without a choice.....
What am I to you?
What can I do?
To be loved, would be like asking God to forget
Would be like asking to give my soul away
To disappear.
I can’t......All I can do is melt away.
Day by day.
Slip further into the dark....
To let it devour my heart.
Little by little.
Until there is no more.
Until there isn’t anything to adore.
To disappear.
To be loved, would be everything to me........
Love is a gift that god gives to those with open eyes, it is a prize too grand to give to only one man. It is in the unanswered prey in which you'll know he'll always care.
Let faith be with you.....




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:shock: I am not much of a poetic person but this poem almost me me cry. Such talent you posses. Such talent you use. I wish i could write poems like yours. I could not find any faults as i read it the second time but its so amazing. Words cannot describe it. Its all i can say. Keep writing. And notify me of more poems.
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Hello, Samantha.

This is beautiful. Such a lot of emotion. I like the pondering, I like the length, because it shows you own this subject, and you have lots of say about it.

Love is such an interesting thing. There are so many kinds of it.

I just have to say that it might be easier to read if you divided it into stanzas, but that's not extremely necessary. A very sweet poem, keep writing!


Demeter xxx
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Overall - A nicely written poem, lots of emotion :o.

It made me sympathise and empathise with the speaker of the poem, this is more of a comment than a real review. Hope to see more of your pieces.

Oh and I agree with what Demeter said on making the poem easier to read, if you divided it into sections it would definitely be a lot easier on the eyes but as she also added it's not completely necessary. I was put off reading it at first because it looked too long (a common mistake when there are no noticeable divisions within the text) but I decided to put it aside and when I read it I was glad I did.

Good luck.

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Proud people breed sad sorrows for themselves.
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