Highway

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Verse 1
Another station's bleeding through
And I heard a better song
And I get the chance to sing again
Should've been listening all along

Chorus
Sixty miles per hours on a country highway
Show me the way, oh show me the way
To the truth I was looking for
I was needing something more

Show me the exit and where to switch lanes
There must be an escape from all the pain
And I think I finally found the truth
I took one turn and then found You

Verse 2
You saved me from the danger ahead
Gave me a detour before I hit a dead end
You saved my soul and made me whole
With you I've reached my goal
when there's nowhere to go, it's time to grow up.




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When I started reading this, I could automatically hear this being put to music. That does not happen very often with me. So congrats on that.

I have no real suggestions to make. But there is one line that I thought was kind of odd, and could do with some rewording:

"Show me the exit and where to the switch lanes."
Please, sit down before you fall down.
Belloq, "Raiders of the Lost Ark"




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It's "where to switch lanes" - i think it sounds okay

overall it's really cool, as your songs always are, but i think you should add more to it. fast. GO! :P




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The words flow well. This would sound good as a song. Though the words were not that impressive but it sounds okay.



We shall not cease from exploration, and the end of all our exploring will be to arrive where we started and know the place for the first time.
— T.S. Eliot