The Legacy, the Chase, My Life chapter one part one

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Chapter One

Today is Monday. The worst day of the week. Not only am I sore, but I also have three major presentations in German, French and Spanish. Ugh! I have to work tonight at the barn, and I have to be at target and wrestling tonight for 10:00. This is one of the longest days of the week for me. I’m supposed to meet Ana- Maria before class so we can go over our presentations.
Ana-Maria is my one and only best friend. She is the only one in the school that looks past the tomboy look. Anyway, Ana is about 5’6 and flat. Unlike me, she is a pin. She has a face full of freckles and long sandy blonde hair. She has the greenest eyes you can imagine and she the sweetest thing next to my grandma’s applesauce. She knows all about me and my various jobs all over the world. Ana has never been out side of her own backyard, except for school. But I guess being the daughter of the richest people in the town has its disadvantages too. I think saying that her parents are very protective is an understatement. Kinda. Ana and I have been friends since the day I moved here in gr.2. I was the outcast of the already clicky group of kinds. Ana was the one that became my friend proving to everybody that I wasn’t a freak. And of coarse they listened. Having her as a best friend sometimes had its advantages. It has disadvantages too. But that’s okay. She’s like the sister I never had and I would put my life on the line for her any day!
I opened my locker and all five of the textbooks that I had shoved in there on Friday fell out on top of me.




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What's the plot to this story? It sounds like you took half of chapter one and threw it on the site. I mean, you're writing's good, but you need to put more on here. I'de be dissapointed if this was the whole of chapter one.

Its a great start. You just need more. I hope you put the rest up soon!
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Nice your really starting to improve.

I love te story already.

Can't wait to read the rest, just pm me when you get the next part done. :D


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