I Love You

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Hey!,
Firstly well done, it's not always easy to write poems like that, I know I'm useless at them. I really enjoyed the poem you had me reading till the very end. Really, really, really, really well done. And please keep writing!.
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I absolutely loved it. I probably coulld not do that type of thing if i tried so my hats off to you * takes off hat and bows* keep up the good work and one day who knows you could publish your very own poetry book. so like i said keep up the good work and i will continue to critic your work. I should have some work up here of my own very soon so in a week or so check out my page.
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Aww, I love it! You did it perfectly, I haven't seen one of these poems in a long time, thanks for bringing it back. As always keep writing!
P.S. If you could would you mind critiquing some of my poems that would be great. Thanks.
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WOW I LOVE THIS!

at first i thought .. oh how immature, an acrostic poem about love..

but i love the vocabulary you used and how the lines were linked rather than like in an acrostic poem they change subject sort of.

well done, i espescially enjoyed...

"Invisible forces that bind me to you, are -



Like selfish vines, thorns that inxtoicate me with,

Obsession, madness, irrational doubt.

Vulgar desires sully my mind with your form,

Every inch of you has been mapped in my dreams.



You'll learn in time, that your hold on me is too strong.

Only death can sever these vine of you gave to me.

Until then, sweet torture you'll stay put in my heart."



haha kidding.m the last line was so good! sweet torture... that is brilliant.




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Oh so sweet! LOL
I liked it (as everyone else) :D
Loved the vocabulary, it was mentioned before, but it's great.
:D :D :D
Anyway, great work! keep on writing!
P.S: i know I didn't help much, as I think that the others have mentioned it all, but I just really wanted to give my opinion!
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