short random dark depressing little poem

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No Rivergirl, I seriously doubt you're ok.

Everybody else, I realize it's not much of a poem. I wrote it on the spur of the moment when I was feeling really depressed and I felt like posting something. *shrugs*. Thanks for all the comments.

But PsyLynx, what did you mean by absolutely hilarious?
Siempre, siempre: jardin de mi agonia,
tu cuerpo fugitivo para siempre,
la sangre de tus venas en mi boca,
tu boca ya sin luz para mi muerte.

-From 'Del amor imprevisto', Federico Garcia Lorca




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It definitely needs more. As of now, it seems like a low-budget horror film that you can rent from Blockbuster for 2 weeks that no one cares about.
when there's nowhere to go, it's time to grow up.




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i don't understand why you put the "listen to the voices in your head" part. I think you should either expand or explain that. I liked the poem though, it rhymed.




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this is true, angsty and...well...true? yeah. it's short, and for some reason i want to scream it in some cliche metal song while running around in circles and killing brain cells.
i actually liked the whole "lies lies lies" thing. god knows why.
cool. yeah. teenage angst. i can feel it.

sigh i'm so high haha =]
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