My Poetry's S**t!?

The title might be a little too strong, but alas.
.......

MY POETRY IS SHIT!

Some say that my poetry,
lacks consistency -
but I don't share this view.
Slowly the penguin shifted,
as the whirling tundra lifted.

Perhaps: I use. Punctuation! incorrectly :~
This does not falter my thoughts' intensity.
Despite the piercing jibes of a "wit" or "critique",
I cherish the guidance from those with technique.

First of all, I loved the title. It grabbed me by the face and pulled me in.

I love the parody. It's great. Especially the random lines with the penguin and the tundra - good poetic lines in and of themselves, perfect humor in the poem.

The line about punctuation was excellent. Hard on the eyes of an editorial type, but very funny - what are the "~" things used for, anyways?

The final two lines didn't quite fit with the poem - but all things considered, it's fine. Great poem!

...just, seriously? Don't really do that.

kris wrote:The title might be a little too strong, but alas.
.......

MY POETRY IS SHIT!

Some say that my poetry,
lacks consistency -
but I don't share this view.
Slowly the penguin shifted,
as the whirling tundra lifted.

Perhaps: I use. Punctuation! incorrectly :~
This does not falter my thoughts' intensity.
Despite the piercing jibes of a "wit" or "critique",
I cherish the guidance from those with technique.

This, my friend, is flawless. I loved every word.

Stanza one was funny and witty, while stanza two was creative and thoughtful.

You're getting a star!

it doesnt matter what the title is this poem makes you laugh either way although the title does make the poem stand out in the forums.

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f somebody comes along and thinks this poems bad because of the title then they obviosly didnt read it because when you read it u completely forget about the title cause you just want to laugh

I like this (it's kind of hard not to.) The only thing is that it could be longer. It's really hilarious

I really liked this...and who does care about the title??? + it makes your poem stand out from the rest.
I also love the randomness, (penguins and tundras)
Couldn't keep myself from laughing about the misplaced punctuation. lol

that was extremely skillful. i loved it.
not to much else to say, keep it right up.

Thank you, so very much for the wonderful critiques everyone.
You've all been so kind about this poem, I really feel touched that you like it so much.

If you honestly have any other critiques or opinions on how I can improve this poem, then please share them.

Love
Kris
x

Honestly ---- hilarious.