You've Tripped Into A Deep Abyss

You've Tripped Into A Deep Abyss

Strangling in white sheets
Wrists wrapped in metal
Body forced downwards
You're running out of breath
You've no control, you've lost
Crying so loud that sirens seem silent
This is your chosen home now
This bed he's tucked you in
No, buried you in
And "is there hope?" does not remotely exist-
It's a dead piece of a once hopeful and playful imagination
Your eyes circle the body that your sad soul now wears
And it kills you how terribly far you've gotten-
Without even having moved an inch

Okay, this was pretty cool. I just have a few questions: why is this person being pushed down the abyss, if indeed that's what it is? "Body forced downwards" doesn't give much info. Is someone murdering you, or are you committing suicide? I am confused.
"No, buried you in" was just a little bit awkward. At least the way you worded it was awkward. If you rephrased the whole bit to something like this:
"The bed He's tucked you in,
The bed he's buried you in" might make it a little easier.

The last two lines didn't make a lot of sense. How is this person progressing? Where have they moved without moving? I think it's a great poem, just a little unclear.

Strangling in white sheets

I think that by making the sheets white you're symbolizing innocence, which gives the speaker a personality, and you feel for him or her.That line was definitely my favorite.

This bed he's tucked you in
No, buried you in

I don't thin you need to correct using No, you can leave that out and it will sound better
And it kills you how terribly far you've gotten-
Without even having moved an inch I don't really get this part,at first it seems like the person is stuck but now you're saying that they're moving but I'm not sure in which direction, out towards death, or is the person already dead.

The message I got from the poem is very powerful. It says so much in so little words it paints a picture and tells a story. It's more powerful since you put the reader in the poem. It could be seen as a number of different taboo things and be a slightly differetn story depending on how the reader sees it. It coulduse a few tweaks but it has a really good concept and overall is well put together. =D