Life is just too hard

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When life is just too hard
When the world just moves too slow
It’s the releasement
It’s the only thing I know
It’s the lending hand
That tells me where to go
It’s the reason for long sleeves
I have nothing to show
Eventually, I suppose
It won’t be enough to hold me home
Last edited by 2Write4ALLways on Sun Aug 10, 2008 10:41 pm, edited 1 time in total.
The things that I knew, I now see, that I don't.
The world is not the place I thought it was.




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Hello! That was a short piece but an interesting one that is really to the point. You started out with a more hopeful feel and ended the poem with not as much optimism. Perhaps that was purposely done. It's just sad to see it go from high to low! I don't know if I quite understood the "jacket" part. What I intitally thought was someone lending you their coat as a sign of goodness and that leads you to have a little hope that everything will be okay. Anyway, it's well written and the correct grammar is used, well done! As for the content...i really hope you haven't lost hope in the world, I can assure you that with time, everything will get better! Stay strong and keep writing! Yay!
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