How it all ended

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How it all ended by MAGICIAN847:

I was stood on the rooftop in the rain,
feeling it land on my head and rolling down my back in droplets,
I found myself isolated from the world,
A gun to my head again.

I have never really contemplated,
Why the world is so like this,
It was two days ago,
My soul became serrated.

I don't care anymore,
I wait for death,
Unafraid, Happy,
Call me crazy if you wish,
I just don't care.

I hear the shouts of people below me,
Spotlights flicker onto the side of the building,
"Come down now! You don't want this!"
He is right, I don't,
But there is no way out.

I flick the gun at him twice,
A deathly taunt,
I hear the guns rattle as their sights land on me,
They won't, they couldn't,
They have a concience.

I return the barrel to my head,
I sigh, My final exhail,
Now i am dead, tumbling through darkness towards the concrete below,
The light approaches,
I knew I couldn't fail...




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I was stood on the rooftop in the rain,

WHAT ARE you, SIMPLE!!?.. no but really.. whats up with that?


A gun to my head again.
I have never really contemplated,

Why the world is so like this,




i believe these sentences are conflicting! he has a gun to his head.. AGANE! and then he says he never contemplated why the world is like this?! liar! thief! so all the other times you have the gun to your head, what are you thinking about?! why your socks dont match?

any hoosier... i enjoyed the last few squares, pretty good.. pretty pretty good. i wassnt expecting much after the first and second sqaures.. but the rest had a good bad feel
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I like to create sympathy for my characters, then set the monsters loose.
— Stephen King