A Different Kind of Storybook

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All right, this is my newest storybook idea. I know this is long, but this is rather complicated. I think you guys will like it though!

Plot
A lot of events have been taking place in Venice lately. A bank robbery, a long string of murders, etc etc. And all the crimes are linked to the same person, so far as the evidence shows. Now the only problem is who.

The police in Venice are completely stumped, so you've been called in. You are a special agent from...wherever you choose to be from (CIA, FBI, MI6, whatever else you might have that I don't know about.) You've been called in to work with 14 other agents on these crimes, hopefully figuring out who committed this long string of crimes.

What you don't know is that someone in your group is responsible - he, or she, is in charge of each of these acts. But who?


General Information
Each person will be allotted two characters. After everyone makes there characters, I will select one person to play the "bad character". The only people who will know which person is the bad character will be myself, and whoever is selected.

Now, no one else will know who the bad character is. And in order to keep this confidentiality, there will be a new account made for this writer to use. (Mesh already ok'd this). This writer will still post as their one, or two, regular characters, but one of their two characters will also be the nameless, faceless "bad-guy". This writer's job is to leave subtle clues for the other writers.

And then the other writers will guess who the bad character is.

Of course, this will all take place in the storybook, with the characters. But you get my idea...I hope...if not, then I must be getting really bad at this.


Rules
-Only one character, unless you PM me and I say it's all right to make a second-
-No God-Modding-
-Each post must be at least two paragraphs long. That means at least three sentences in each paragraph, preferably more.-
-Please post your characters name at the top of each post, along with a time, and approximate location; this makes things less confusing-


Character Profile
Follow this general format, please. Of course, you are free to have any extra categories you see fit:

Name:
Age:
Country (where they came from):
Organization (who do they work for):
Appearance:
Personality:
Special Abilities (this one isn't absolutely necessary):


Characters
There can only be fifteen characters total, and I'm hoping we'll get up to that number. I'd like you to start with only one character, and PM me to ask if you can make a second. If you don't PM me, but we don't have enough characters, I might PM you instead.

I'll edit this as we go, to keep track of characters.

1- AyumiGosu17 - Kenya Durant - CIA
2- Sylverdawn - Ray A'llen - FBI
3- Dr. Jamie Bondage - Conner Hansan - CIA
4- FireArris - Melanie Travis - CIA
5- magician847 - Steven Valenthorn - CIA
6- XxXSerenityStillXxX - Johnathon Jones - CIA
7- RoryLegend - Peter Davin - CIA
8- Maybe - Milo Barton - CIA
9- Kitty15 - Samuel Andrews - SIS (MI6)
10- Alice - Claire - Venice Police Force
11- kittykat - Maijorie Gensitine - SIS (MI6)
12- Layleun - Alanna Kozachuk - Venice Police Force
13- Bella - Isabella Milan - SIS (MI6)
14- piepiemann22 - Eric Shields - Military Investigation
15- October Girl - Asher Luna - FBI
16- cat4prowl - Seul Freeman - Venice Police Department
Last edited by Bella on Fri Aug 08, 2008 9:22 pm, edited 6 times in total.
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Awesome idea! Count me in!


Name: Kenya Durant
Age: 22
Country: Italy
Organization: CIA
Appearance: 5'8, very slender and curvy, jet black hair that falls to her waist, silver eyes
Personality: generally calm and collected, doesn't open up to people easily, and has a slight temper
Special Abilities: she can see hidden details or clues unknown or undetected by anyone or anything else
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*sounds complicated, but interesting*

name- Ray A'llen
age- 23
gender- male
country- USA, born in Greece his family imigrated to America when he was a child.
organization- FBI, to be specific a profiler

appearance- http://media.photobucket.com/image/blac ... t.jpg?o=22

personality- Hot headed and reckless. But cool under pressure. Arrogant and prideful, sure of himself. Cunning. He's the type that will throw a fit over the littlest thing, but doesn't say a word when he's really hurting. Weirdly, he rarely loses his temper completly, but when he does he can be pretty cruel. Has a very strong sense of justice, although slightly warped, he doesn't play by the book. A risk taker and wild card.

Special Abilities- Has an extremely high IQ, was out of college when he was fifteen. He's already one of the most trusted field agents. Has an uncanny knack for getting inside the criminals head and figuring out how he thinks. An expert marksman, trained as a sniper, and martial artist, good with a knife and pretty much any weapon.

other- Ray is the air to a big time family of assasins, he was trained to kill since he was a child, however because of his sense of justice, he joined the FBI instead, he is now estranged from his family. And has actually helped to bring several of them in.




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Name: Conner Hansan

Age: 25

Country: Ireland originally, but now works for American government. (has an accent. XD)

Organization: CIA

Appearance: Blonde hair, tall, stunning blue eyes. Has a scar on his left arm where he was cut with a knife. Small hooped earing in his right ear.
Personality:

Special Abilities: Is best with guns. He's an expert. He also does well undercover.




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Ooh! Oooh! I'm joining! I'll edit this with my profile later. :D Pssst I wannna bee tehhh badd guyyy
[Griffinkeeper] 10:45 pm: The guard appears "We have weasels now!"
[Firearris] 10:45 pm: askes the guard for the weasel!
[Griffinkeeper] 10:45 pm: The guard gives Firearris the Weasel.
[Firearris] 10:46 pm: aquires the weasel and renames it "Cat"

Take that, Lumi.




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All right, we're off to a great start!

DR - I'm not sure if you meant to leave it out, but you didn't post your characters personality. If you don't want to post it, at least put something like "will be learned in SB" please.

Arris - Who doesn't want to be the bad guy? Haha.

Also, a space is automatically saved for me, just so you all know. I should have posted a profile already, but I don't have one quite yet.
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Oops! I didn't realize I had! *blushes* Well...people will learn quickly what he's like in the sb. XD Sorry I forgot! =*(




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Name: Melanie (Mel) Travis
Age: 27
Country (where they came from): USA
Organization (who do they work for): CIA
Appearance: Long brown hair and brown eyes, tends to where hair up. Wears mostly jeans and medium-length-sleeved shirts.
Personality: Will find out later in the SB
Special Abilities (this one isn't absolutely necessary): Is good and smart with most weapons
[Griffinkeeper] 10:45 pm: The guard appears "We have weasels now!"
[Firearris] 10:45 pm: askes the guard for the weasel!
[Griffinkeeper] 10:45 pm: The guard gives Firearris the Weasel.
[Firearris] 10:46 pm: aquires the weasel and renames it "Cat"

Take that, Lumi.




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Count me in!

Name: Steven (Snake) Valenthorn

Age: 21

Country (where they came from):
UK

Organization (who do they work for):
CISO (If it doesn't have to exist: Crime Investigation Special Ops, otherwise: CIA)

Appearance:
Short Black hair, in military style, but slightly longer than usually allowed in army.

Personality: Will find out later in the SB, but until then: Ex-military stealth ops.

Special Abilities (this one isn't absolutely necessary):
Almost a reverse agent where he will ignore other operatives and sneak in the shadows to find out clues, very good with sniper rifle.




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Yah i'll join, can i be a medium?

Name:Johnathon David Jones

Age: 22

Country:UK, Wales

Organization:CIA

Appearance:Tall, hansome, long black hair, pale white skin.

Personality:Takes his job really seriously, funny, energetic and kind.

Special Abilities (this one isn't absolutely necessary):Medium
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>>magician947 - I think I'd prefer CIA, just to make this more realistic
>>Serenity - You can be a medium, seeing as they do have those in real life and whatnot, but don't make it anything too supernatural and out there please.
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Name: Dr. Peter Davin
Age: 27
Country: USA
Organization: CIA
Appearance: Shaggy (but not too shaggy) black hair, green eyes, tall, slender/ lean, http://z.about.com/d/worldfilm/1/0/D/V/ ... begins.jpg
Personality: very smart, keeps to himself most of the time, you'll learn more
special Abilities (this one isn't absolutely necessary): not sure if this counts as a "special ability" but he is like a phsyciatrist. He studies the workings of the human brain and trys to figure out why criminals do the things they do. He also studies patterns of behavior and is good at crunching numbers.
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Name: Milo Barton

Age: 24

Country: UK

Organization: CIA

Appearance: Milo has a very slim build but is reasonably tall, standing nearly 6' 4". He has often untidy dark brown hair and mud-brown eyes with a hint of green around the right iris. He normally wears casual clothing and is rarely seen without his hat that looks like an army hat.

Personality: Milo tends to act incredibly superstitious, though most of it is for show. He carries around good luck charms and things of that nature wherever he goes. Besides that, he's wary of almost everyone when he first meets them, but ends up finding trust easily. He's friendly and has a good sense of humor once you get to know him. He has been known to be a bit of a coward at times, but he usually makes up for it. He's also obsessed with fire.

Special Abilities: He has a fairly high I.Q. and is obsessed with the details. It's pretty hard for him to overlook anything. He's also good with the blade and favors it more than the gun.
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An interesting idea, Bella. It's been a while since I've been in a proper murder mystery.

Name: Samuel Andrews, often uses the code-name 'Andrew (Andy) Harlow' or 'Sir Drew Baudlay.'
Age: 43
Country: England.
Organization: SIS (Also known as MI6) See here for more info.
Appearance: He's not bad looking but he's getting older and the job hasn't been kind to him. He has sharp, expressive blue-grey eyes, short, white-grey hair and a lean, muscled body that goes unnoticed below his dark trousers or jeans and alternating casual or smart shirts, depending on his current alias. A thin scar runs from the base of his ear, down his neck and is about eight centimetres in length. There are others along his right knuckles and fingers and one in the middle of his back.
History: He will tell you a different story, dependant on who he is.

As Andy, he's an electrician who dresses in jeans and casual, usually white shirts with a tool belt at his waist when he's working. He has a photo of his wife and two children in his wallet and he's a friendly, easy going sort of man. He got the scar down his neck during an act of heroism, when he was trying to disarm a drunken man with a broken bottle, a story he's fond of telling, particularly when in a bar. The scars on his knuckles and fingers are from when he broke a window with his bare fist during the days when he was a volunteer, part time fire-man and needed to make an exit from the top floor of a house. He's a very down to earth sort of guy, the type you don't mind talking to.

Drew is an important businessman, the head of a huge corporation that trades in stocks and shares. He's a proud man, the sort of man who you don't ask about his scars but a few know that the one down his neck is from an attempted murder by a man whose business failed, partly because Drew pulled out his funding. And those on his knuckles and fingers are from many years of training falcons. Drew is a bachelor and gets lonely from time to time.

And finally, his real past is thus: Samuel is an intelligent man who joined the police early in life and was soon found to have a knack for working cases out so he was sought out by the SIS. He joined at the age of twenty four and has worked on many cases since then, expanding his knowledge and taking on injuries. The scar down his neck is from an early case, when a criminal tried to hold him at knife point but was over-whelmed by Sam's superior strength and willingness to push the knife across his own neck in order to reach his attacker. The scars on his knuckles gained a little later when he needed to smash a window in order to gain fast entry to a building. The scar in the middle of his back is the most recent. One of the only times he wasn't wearing a protective vest, Sam was stabbed in the back by another member of the SIS. Further details may be revealed later by ultimately, this led to Sam's retirement until now, four years later when he has been called back into action.

Personality: Sam is intelligent, reliable and loyal. He was known amongst the SIS for being a loyal, dedicated man who was good at working in a team, strongly driven, fearless and, when necessary, a little brutal. In fact, he's a bit of a legend amongst the people of SIS but his early retirement is surrounded by exaggerated versions of the truth.

Special Abilities: Sam isn't the strongest physically, particularly after a few years out of action but he's a tough fighter and good with a range of weapons. He's the sort of man who can improvise when he needs to and he has a strong sense of honour.

Other: Sam has his dark side too. People have a right to be wary when they hear of his retirement and the events surrounding it because it's changed him. Sam is just that little bit more brutal now and a little over-impulsive. He is also a prone to suspicion which hinders his skills as a team-player.
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Name: Claire
Age: 21
Country : USA
Organization: Venice police force (Detective)
Appearance: http://s200.photobucket.com/albums/aa16 ... nime-2.jpg
Personality: She's got a talent for trouble, very independent, and only moderately klutzy. She's totally able to take care of her self.
Special Abilities: Just her talent for trouble and her uncanney photographic memory.
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