Hey Baby

Hey Baby, how are you?
Do you feel lost in life too?

My heart is ready to break,
With the empty pain of you not being here.
I suffer through these terrible aches,
Because I know you're gone with every tear.

I don't know what you would call it.
It's not like we had a choice.
But I wish things could have turned out different,
And I could still hear your soothing voice.

So this is it then?
This is the final goodbye.
I'll never be yours again.
But yet, you'll never be mine.



-Lindsay

Hope you guys like...or rip it into pieces. I know it's short but eh

eh, wasnt really feeling this, the beginning anyway, didnt flow to well in my mind, but the end was prettty good and depressing, can relate-- so this is it? ok then, goodbye then, (fuggin bich)-- how it usually goes

Its was good Linds!
Its was definitely shorter that your usual but that's OK!
I think you could add more to it and it could be really good!
Maybe you could also express your feeling in the poem more.
I am sorry for your loss too.
I but it could be a great poem.

I L.O.V.E this poem!!!! lol but anyways I like this oem because you weren't too wordy but it still caught on :]] it was romantic and depressing at the same time get it? It was great linds I miss you!

-Max

Well ~

like the others have said,

More emotion on how you felt, rather then the situation,

would of gave a pond inwhich the reader could try to grab up what your feeling,

But i did like it, overall, the beggining and ending really caught my eye, and it was good ^^

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Eh ^^ sorry allow me to correct myself,

By 'Beggining' I meant after the first 2 lines,

I didnt really think that was a good way to start a poem.

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