This popped into my head on Corel Painter, of all things.

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#FF0000 ">Love

I would like
if you merely came across
to me and said
what i'd love to say

What isn't loving anymore?
and what isn't good?
those meaningless words
turned, almost bitter by time
I'm sure you meant well
When you said that you love me

well I'm scared of that word
Scared, scared scared of what I don't comprehend!
Scared, scared
like a docile mouse in the sights of an eagle
in the sky

Scared of that word
I hate it, I'm sorry
I'm sorry
I don't understand love
Please,
Don't say it again...?




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wow. this poem did not really flow that well but it was sensational! i don't call me things sensational but this one truly was....brilliant job. *Shakes deadly_teapot*'s hand. Also, i think you should take the "?" off the end but other than that, dont change a single thing....this poem was phenomenal.
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I saw this on the last page with only 1 review, so I wanted to try to help out.

deadly_teapot wrote:#FF0000 ">Love

I would like
if you merely came across
to me and said
what i'd love to say

What isn't loving anymore?
and what isn't good?
those meaningless words
turned, almost bitter by time
I'm sure you meant well
When you said that you love me

well I'm scared of that word
Scared, scared scared of what I don't comprehend!
Scared, scared
like a docile mouse in the sights of an eagle
in the sky

Scared of that word
I hate it, I'm sorry
I'm sorry
I don't understand love
Please,
Don't say it again...?


Wow, nice. OK, so in line 4, "i'd" needs to be capital (I'm not big on that, or punctuation, but some people are) Second stanza, "well" needs to be capital, and I agree with Chevy that the "?" needs to be taken off, unless that's a question, than you would say "Are you going to say it again...?" or something like that.
Overall, I liked this, it had emotion, but, like Chevy said, it didn't flow to well, but that didn't bother me, I understood it perfectly.
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