Jesse

ok, so I made this up in the middle of my school year last year. I made it for my best friend. I changed her name so it isn't really Jesse. This is just a silly little thing that I thought I would put on here. Hope you enjoy it

Jesse I love you like whoa,
so please don't ever go.
If you did I would cry,
I would drop dead and die,
and also I'd feel really low.

That's too cute.

Sportgurl46 wrote:Jesse I love you like whoa,
so please don't ever go.
If you did I would cry,
I would drop dead and die,
[s]and also I'd feel really low.[/s]

I really don't think the last line is needed, but oh well.

its super cute! and since it's for a friend, ignore my little statement above

Oh sport girl
with a poem not hard to unfurl
i always miss that certain poem
that reminds me of puppy loves dome
and it would do me no good to lie
without limericks i would too die

That was cute! I liked it!

Rascalover wrote:

Sportgurl46 wrote:Jesse I love you like whoa,
so please don't ever go.
If you did I would cry,
I would drop dead and die,
[s]and also I'd feel really low.[/s]

I really don't think the last line is needed, but oh well.

its super cute! and since it's for a friend, ignore my little statement above

If it's a limerick, dropping the last line would make it not a limerick anymore. Maybe you should think of something else that rhymes with "go" and "whoa" that flows better. But overall, I enjoyed it! It made me smile.

lolz short and cute last line didnt really fit but overall good job

errtu2: Please don't double post, unless that was an accident, its against the rules, I think! Sorry!

This was a cute little poem and I agree that the last line should be scratched.

Not much else to say except: this would make a cool song! I can hear the song in my head already XD

#Jesse, I love you, like, whoa!#


Nice little ditty.


Charlotte

thank you guys for your suggetions
ok, so this is supposed to be a lymrick and taking out the last line would no longer make it a lymrick. it is supposed to be funny (the last line) but i guess i am the only oe who gets it because i am the one who wrote it.
oh well

rofl.
I loved this.

I was actually playing guitar when I read this, and I unconciously turned it into a little song.

i wish i could hear it

Very cute. I agree that the last line needs to be changed a little - maybe "and then I would feel really low" instead?

Hehe. It totally feels like a pop song. Very adorable.

Ok, I know it's supposed to be silly, but adding the "whoa" made it seem just a touch too silly. I''m sorry to say it, but it reeks a touch of Aly and AJ. It is good, though. I can't write lymricks for crap. Just change your word choice a bit, and it would be better