A Promise

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A Promise

Our golden days seem to fade away,
but those good memories
are still etched on your face.
Everyday, an obstacle burdens us,
but again, you manage to smile.

Everytime when the dawn rises,
something dark is always waiting ahead.
Somehow, we always surpass it...

Because you are right here by my side,
bound with a vow to protect happiness.
Even if sadness cuts like a knife,
with you, I seem to be invincible.
And we'll stand, together,
racing towards light.

It's a promise between you and I,
so let's be the best, until the end of time.
Hope for the best, but prepare for the worst.




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AWWWW! That is so sweet. I like how it tells of overcoming everything in your path. Inspirational...
No where to run...baby let's hide. Take her in your arms on a chilling winter's night. Watch the stars twinkle and glisten. Know that you've found the one person that will listen. ~*(ME)*~




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This was a really heartwarming poem.




It actually sounds like something I would write.





And I could relate to that poem completely. Simply a work of pure genius and from the heart.





Please continue writing adorable poems like these.





I didn't really see any grammar mistakes, no sudden jumps from stanza to stanza or anything...





Keep writing. Hope to hear more from you soon.







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"If I can stop one heart from breaking, I shall not live in vain." --- Emily Dickenson




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>< That totally sounds like me an my best friend. I really want to show her that now lol. This is a very wonderful piece, I liked it a lot.
"When a thought takes one's breath away, a grammar lesson seems an impertienence."
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I really liked this poem! It seemed so real.

I just have a few suggestions:

"Everytime when the dawn rises,
something dark is always waiting ahead.
Somehow, we always surpass it... "

Comma after "Everytime"
The ellipses seems kind of ill-fitting. A period would be better, in my opinion.

Okay! So, obviousy, this poem was very good, as my only suggestions happened to be grammar! I liked the words you used, they were very pungent and got to the heart of the matter without playing around. Very well written!!

Thanks for the read!

--Cassie
"You can't depend on your eyes when your imagination is out of focus." Mark Twain

I am hopelessly addicted to Disney music from the classic animated films.

"In a world of my own, everyone would have a dozen bluebirds."



grammar is hard and i dislike it immensely
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