The Phantom Lives: Novel Adaption

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To Dance the Path of Darkness

Christiana scratched and twisted, scrabbled and bit at the iron grip on her wrist. But resistance was futile; the man who had snatched her from the stage had locked his leather-clad fingers around her forearm tightly and was dragging her remorselessly deeper under the Opera Populaire. Christiana dug her heels into the damp wood that lined the floor of the walkway he was taking her down and yanked backwards, hard. She almost over-balanced her abductor, who stumbled slightly and halted.

'Let me go, you hellish fiend! Who the hell do you think you are? The Surete will be hot on my trail, I assure you!'

'Of that I have no doubt, mademoiselle,' the kidnapper replied icily, responding for the first time since he had taken her. He whirled around to face Christiana, drawing himself up to his full height. She gasped.

At this close range, she could see who this stranger really was. He towered above her tiny five-foot-four frame, dwarfing her completely with the large opera cape that hung in dramatic folds from his broad shoulders. He was somewhat muscular, solidly built and his wide chest resembled that of the most experienced of operatic tenors. The right hand side of his face was obscured with a white mask that appeared to be made of porcelain. The weak light from the grimy lantern he held in his left hand reflected off its smooth surface. It was the skull of an angel and from behind it and the brim of the black fedora he had pulled down over his forehead; two stunning amber eyes glowed in the night...

'You,' she breathed.

The darkness personified grinned in a terrifyingly cold way from the left hand side of his face. 'Yes, me. I said we would meet again. Now it is as I foretold.'

The words dropped like ice down her spine as Christiana fought to keep a brave face.

'You made it happen! I’d hardly call it a prophesy.'

'What you fail to understand about me, Christiana, is that I seldom don't make things happen. Everything is meticulously planned, to the moment. Your presence onstage tonight was no accident. I planned to take you from it. Now silence! We must hurry. Those fools in the Surete will be close behind on the more traditional route to the catacombs and I am anxious to divert from it immediately.'

With that, the Phantom turned around and calmly resumed to his task of dragging his less-than-helpful hostage further into the dank cold that enveloped the catacombs that ran beneath the Paris Opera House. Fear held a chilly grip around Christiana's heart as the Opera Ghost reached the edge of a glassy black lake, several storeys below the stage. At the edge of the lake, where the water lapped quietly at the shore line, a gondola waited. The Phantom hauled Christiana into it and sat her down with a thud. He drew his face level with hers and sneered, golden eyes malicious behind the cold mask.

'Now be silent. If you try and leave the boat, you will die. This water is ice-cold and will freeze the very blood pumping through your veins.'

He reached down towards her and Christiana recoiled slightly, terrified that he would strike her. But he simply picked up a punting stick and pushed off from the water's edge and moved the gondola silently across the lake. Down here, the only light that glinted off the damp walls came from the old lantern that the Phantom had affixed to the front of the boat. Despite the numbing horror that felt glacier-like down her spine, Christiana became aware of a pleasing sound. She turned very, very slowly. Unbelievable! He was humming to himself! As if this were a pleasant outing and he was taking her on a picnic! The cold fear in her back slowly heated into anger. She bottled it and stored it deep in the pit of her stomach. As soon as this… Phantom brought her to where it was he was going; she'd be ready for him.

After some time, a small, rocky island appeared in the middle of the lake. On it sat a strange little house, twisted but structurally sound. It rose up in the thinning mist; a stony iceberg, slightly smaller than the Opera House stage. It was split level, with a look-out perched precariously on top of the circular first floor. Christiana noticed that there was no dock for mooring the little boat as they approached, but the Phantom didn't seem to care. The boat rocked gently as it nudged the stony shore and her kidnapper stepped lightly out of the gondola and landed on the island. He gallantly (if slightly ironically) offered her his gloved hand and helped her onto dry land. She stood staring at the odd house as he flourished his cape in its direction from behind her.

‘Here is where the great mind of the Phantom has been held prisoner against its will for the last century! Here is where love locked it away in misery and left it in sorrow! But genius waited patiently for revenge and now a Daae has returned! Now, now your family will get what it deserves,’ The Phantom crowed, his chin resting near her right shoulder.

The rage that Christiana had kept bottled up now flooded the pit of her stomach, repulsed by his sudden close proximity. Her left heel came down sharply on the toe of his boot, while her right elbow swung backwards and caught him in the stomach. Temporarily stunning and winding her abductor, Christiana leapt back into the boat and grabbed the punting stick.

‘Not today, buddy! I can’t believe you would actually try and make me responsible for an airhead who lived a hundred years ago!’ Christiana snapped and tried to push off. But the gondola sagged beneath her and she looked down. The freezing water was flooding into a perfectly circular hole cut into the base, soaking her satin heels. She looked back up at the Phantom, who had regained his composure and was holding a small, black plug with a black string attached to it in his right hand. He smiled lopsidedly at her. The triumph of the moment ebbed away and suddenly Christiana felt really, really stupid.

‘Brash, bold and very courageous, my dear. But obviously you think that I have lived down here for this length of time and not worked out that should I lose control over one of my… guests, the boat is the only way off the island. Really, I thought you might give me a little more credit that that.’

‘And being the artful dodger you are, I bet you’re lying. But you aren’t going to tell me, are you?’

The Phantom smiled broadly and offered his hand to help her out of the boat.

‘You’re learning. Come, I wish to show you my abode.’

The house was just as puzzling as its owner. Small and dank, the smell of musty centuries lay on the still air. What caught Christiana’s eye as she squished sulkily through the somewhat spacious chambers was the massive organ that took up most of the front room that overlooked the lake. She sat down at it and ran her fingers over the keys lightly. The Phantom stood back; watching her like a hawk watches its prey.

‘This is amazing. How did you get it down here?’

‘It was salvaged, so many years ago, like most everything here. The desk, the very stone this house is constructed from… all saved from the cruel world above. They would have thrown it away, but down here it gains a new life.’

‘I can see,’ Christiana murmured. The notes echoed out into the darkness and rang like bells.

‘I can hear,’ she whispered. Her fingers flitted across the keyboard and played a soft tune. The Phantom nodded to himself and strode over to his mahogany desk. Christiana had noticed that it had been repaired, presumably from being cracked in two. The Opera Ghost opened his inkwell and took up a nearby quill.

‘Feel free to investigate, my dear, but be warned that any attempt to escape will end your life more suddenly than any method I could choose right now,’ he purred. Christiana pulled a nasty face and set off.

It didn’t take her long to circumvent the house on the island. It seemed that it was the only thing there. There was no obvious way off, apart from the boat, but then again, she reasoned, that was probably how he meant it to appear. His type of fruit-loop did.

She reached down and pulled off the soggy high-heeled shoes that were hurting her. She’d only worn them for the performance anyway. Christiana sat at the water’s edge and let the icy blackness close over her toes as she paddled them, desperate to keep the boredom away with the thoughts of what this madman wanted from her.

He was obviously obsessed with the Daae family, so his motive was clear. But what did he plan to do with her? Kill her? That seemed like the most appropriate and logical conclusion. But if that were the case, wouldn’t he have come up with some more insidious plan than kidnapping her off the stage and bringing her here? It was infuriating. The more she thought about it, the more of a mystery this so-called Phantom appeared to be.

Perhaps keeping her in suspense was part of his malicious plot to end her. Yes, that would be it. Leave her waiting for death and the moment she didn’t expect it, wham! Down and out. Christiana hugged her knees to her chest, resting her forehead on them and fighting simultaneously the lump in her throat and the burning tears behind her eyes. She could try to be strong and spit in this man’s eye, but when the curtain came down and it was time for the final encore, she would be dead and no-one would know where she was.

Taking a deep breath, Christiana raised her head. No. She would not allow this creep to get away with what he’d done and if she was going to be resigned to death, then to hell with crying! She was going to go down fighting all the way!

She clambered to her feet and strode around to the front door of the quizzical house. Storming in, Christiana slammed her hands palm down on the edge of the hardwood desk. This caused her a deal of pain and her fingers throbbed, but she wasn’t going to give this idiot the honour of seeing her suffer pain. She stared down at him, furious, and it only frustrated her more when he didn’t even look up from the page he was writing on. Christiana grabbed the quill from his right hand and threw it aside. The Phantom sighed softly, folded his hands and leant back in his chair, watching her lazily.

‘If you’re going to kill me, I’d rather you just get it over and done with, rather than letting me sit here for ages, allowing my thoughts of doom to snowball,’ Christiana demanded. The Phantom was silent and regarded her seriously through the half-mask. This served to further infuriate her and she slammed a fist down for emphasis.

‘Why won’t you speak to me? Are you afraid of me? Why won’t you just end this? You brought me here to murder me, didn't you?! Do you intend to let me go mad first? Is that it? ANSWER ME!’

The Phantom got up and left the room silently. He returned a moment later with a beautiful violin, crafted from a dark varnished maple.

‘Mademoiselle Christiana, if you would be so kind as to lead the way to the lakeside, I believe there is something I wish for you to hear,’ he said softly. Feeling shaken and slightly deflated, Christiana stalked sulkily out of the door and waited by the water-logged gondola. With a brief flourish of his opera cloak, the Phantom raised the stunning instrument to his shoulder. Gently, as if he caressed it with a lover’s touch, he drew the bow across the strings and summoned forth a bevy of entrancing notes. All the anger and hatred that Christiana had felt pumping through her like electricity melted away as she stood and listened in awe to the Phantom’s mournful ballad. She twirled on the spot, her arms extended gracefully as her skirts fluttered in the weak light from the lantern still attached to the front of the gondola. As she danced for the Phantom, Christiana made up her own lyrics to the sad melody:

Who, is, the man in the mask?
I shudder to think but I’m desperate to ask
Who, could, be reduced to this farce?
Tell me who is the man in the mask…


The Phantom peered down the fingerboard of the violin and smiled weakly at his guest’s musical accompaniment. He began to play with a deep ferocity, tearing at the strings so that the notes were loud and abrasive. Christiana stopped singing and stood still as the Phantom attacked the melody with vigour and took a tiny step backwards. Oh God, this is it, she thought desperately, he's finally flipped and I'm going to die. After a few minutes, he laid the violin down in the doorway of the little house. He extended a hand to her.

‘My dear?’

Intrigued, Christiana took up his offer and found herself nose-to-chest with her abductor. Timid and curious, she looked up from the buttons of his black silk waistcoat.

‘What…’

‘Shhh… listen.’

As silence fell around them, Christiana was aware of a soft, but audible sound that danced in the air like a nymph.

The walls were singing.
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As Christiana rested her head against the Phantom’s velveteen lapels, inhaling his subtle scent of damp sandalwood, she closed her eyes and listened, allowing him to move her in steady, practiced circles across the stone bank. His slow heartbeat kept the rhythm as the echoes of the exuberant violin music he had just played floated across the lake back to them as they waltzed at the waterside.

‘They’re singing,’ she whispered in wonder. The Phantom smiled gently, taking her right hand from his chest and placing it behind his neck.

‘Yes, they often do that.’

‘But it’s so big down here… how?’

‘The acoustics are very unusual in the catacombs. The air is still and there is little between the walls to prevent the music returning.’

‘So the walls sing with your music.’

‘Yes, I suppose they do.’

The echoes died into silence and slowly, very slowly, the couple stopped. Neither of them moved for a full minute, until…

‘Erik.’

Christiana opened her eyes and looked up. But the Phantom wasn’t looking at her, nor did he acknowledge the name he had just uttered. His amber eyes were gazing sadly across the lake.

‘I’m sorry?’ Christiana asked, slightly dazed.

‘So am I. My name. It’s Erik, which is more than your great-grandmother ever knew. I’m sorry, Christiana.’

Suddenly, it wasn’t a violent Phantom or a twisted genius that held her tenderly in his arms, but a tall, strong man who was caught in a fight to save his soul. In an instant, Christiana saw the man behind the mask more clearly than if he had actually taken it off.

The mask… the mask needs to go…

‘Take it off,’ she said bluntly, surprising even herself by the request. Erik gave her a quizzical look.

‘Beg pardon, mademoiselle?’

‘Take it off. Take the mask off.’

Christiana would remember later how quickly the mood of the scene changed. She would say that in the blink of an eye, Erik’s fury rose like an asp and struck her with the force of a hurricane.

‘How dare you make demands of me? ME! Five minutes ago you were begging me not to finish killing you! Whatever I may seem to you, I am still the Phantom of the Opera! You will remember that and respect me!’ Erik roared, sending his hostage stumbling backwards. As he advanced, Christiana kicked, bit and spat at him. A well-aimed blow to the right knee sent him sprawling, but served only to increase the level of his temper.

Erik grabbed both of Christiana’s arms and began to pull her towards the house. But something in his unfounded rage had struck a nerve deep in the heart of her deep-seated fear and brought up the core of it: anger. With strength unknown to her previously, Christiana wrenched her arms away, tearing the sleeves of her Evanesca costume. Erik was left standing awkwardly grasping strips of torn emerald-coloured gauze and staring wildly at the incensed young woman. Christiana stared at the torn sleeves for one fury-fuelled moment, then began ripping at the remainder of them.

Shoving the remnants of the material into Erik's hands, Christiana shrieked at him, ‘You want it? Take it then! Take it all! Take everything you want! Take me! All of me! Take, take, take!'

Eventually, Erik caught her wrists as she tried to beat against his solid chest. His eyes burned brightly with passion, his breath ragged as he sought to calm her. Her ferocity to fight and to live was overwhelming and, frankly, quite stimulating. He pulled her close to his body, letting her feel every steely muscle that moved under the silk waistcoat and past his ornate leather belt. Christiana's eyes widened, then narrowed.

'If you do not calm yourself in the next ten seconds, my dear, I will most definitely take you up on that offer. This fiery display serves as nothing more than a tantalizing prelude to an overture spent making sweet music with various areas of your anatomy!' The Phantom seethed. His hostage tried to spit at him in retaliation.

‘What, Monsieur, makes you think that you have the right to treat me in this impertinent manner! Phantom or not, you are nothing but a wailing youngster who throws a tantrum every time he cannot get his own way! Well, sir, I tell you this; no man, or Phantom, has the right to speak to a woman the way you just have!’ Christiana screamed, her voice filling the immediate area between them. Erik dropped her arms and rammed his hands over his ears, dropping to his knees, unable to bear her tirade.

‘Stop shouting at me! Your voice… oh God, your voice,’ Erik sobbed, dragging his palms over his eyes. Christiana stared in shock as the Phantom was reduced to a blubbering child, curled up into a foetal position on the stone bank and rocking forward on the ground. She sighed and sat next to him, rubbing his back.

‘What about my voice?’ Christiana whispered gently. Erik was silent.

‘Well, if you aren’t going to tell me…’

‘You sound like Christine.’

The Phantom sat up slowly and with great care composed himself. A brief look of embarrassment flashed through his eyes, but his hostage did not notice. He looked Christiana straight in the eye.

‘When your great-grandfather, the Vicomte… Raoul, came to save Christine from the Phantom, he failed to see just how strong she really was. She had yelled and screamed at me for a long time beforehand, accusing me of terrible crimes, some of which I’ll admit culpability. But the last thing she said before he arrived, which neither of us ever admitted to saying or hearing…’

Christiana reached out and took Erik’s right hand gently, not daring to tear her eyes away lest the snake struck again.

‘What did she say… Erik?

‘She… she said she was sorry. She was sorry she couldn’t be more, or less. Sorry that that was where our story ended and a new one had to begin. She was sorry that I loved her. She was sorry… that she loved me too.’

Christiana felt her eyes prickle with unshed tears. Had things turned out different, if her great-grandmother chosen differently… the man she sat next to would be her own blood.

‘Is that what keeps you here, like this, then? The memory of Christine?’

Erik’s laugh was dead and cold as he climbed slowly to his feet, if a little unsteadily. He straightened his soft jacket with a tug.

‘No, Mademoiselle, ‘tis something more frightful than that.’

‘Tell me, then. If you so choose, you can kill me in an instant. Yet here I sit before you, questioning you, more than two hours after you stole me from the stage. Clearly you would have killed me if that were your intention, but there is something more that you want from me. Before I die, I must know. What, or who, has condemned you to your fate?’

The Phantom disappeared inside the twisted and bizarre little house and returned a moment later with a tiny locket. He handed it to Christiana and settled back down at her side. Christiana turned the piece of jewelry over in her hands. The pendant was elliptical, covered with gold leaf and hung on a thin chain that was as light as a cobweb. On the pendant were two snakes, intertwined, each set with brilliant emeralds and peridots.

‘That locket once belonged to a Romani gypsy-queen, who also happened to be a rather powerful witch. I lived with her clan for a while and one night, she summoned me to her bed. I stole the locket impetuously, purely because I wanted payment for my, ah, services and had planned to leave the clan the following morning. Unfortunately, it was not long before she had discovered my crime. She placed a terrible curse upon the holder of the locket… to endure life everlasting in the same form as when their hands first touched the locket that was not theirs to take.’

‘But surely you could have sent it on?’

‘Ah, but that would not have broken the curse. See, the locket was not mine to take, but I was the one to take it. The curse will still be on me should I pass the locket on.’

Christiana was slightly jarred for a moment.

Is there a way to break the curse?’

Erik smiled sadly and patted her hand.

‘I take it you know the Grimm’s Brothers tale of Beauty and the Beast?’

‘Great Disney film, that was.’

‘Pardon?’

‘Never mind. Yes, I know the story. The Beast can only be freed if he learns to love and earns love in re… oh.’

Suddenly, everything made so much more sense. Christiana laughed softly at the simplicity of it all.

‘She really loved you, didn’t she? That gypsy-queen. But you didn’t feel the same way and betrayed her. So now she’s condemned you to walk the years until you can love someone the way she did and earn their love without being selfish in return.’

‘You know, you’re really quite intelligent when you aren’t yelling at people.’

‘I have to make up for my faults in other ways, Erik.’

For a moment, both were silent. Then Christiana reached over and took the locket, dropping the chain around her own neck. Erik began to protest, but she silenced him.

‘Like it or not, Erik, we are bound to each other. There is the weight of history that forces our story onward like a runaway locomotive. I’ll take this locket and bind it to my skin… for now, anyway. Until you find what you are looking for, this locket has been taken from you. What you can't see you won't think about.’

Erik snorted with mirth. 'So I'm just imagining this suffering since your great-grand-mother left. That's a positive thought.'

'Don't get sarcastic with me. I'm only trying to help.'

‘I cannot ask you to help carry my burden, child,’ Erik muttered. Christiana smirked.

‘You didn’t. You know, for an intelligent man, Erik, sometimes you can be really, really stupid.’

-Disclaimer. I wish I owned Phantom, but I don't. Monsieur Leroux and Monsieur Lloyd Webber do, lucky boys!-




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Wait a second. What do you mean by "novel adaptation"? Are you adapting from the novel or are you writing your own novel that is an adaptation? Because if it is the first, your image of the Phantom needs to be tweaked a little. If not, and you are going with the Webber image, by all means, fire away.

Christiana's reactions seemed really inconsistent. She started out intending to escape and furious with the Phantom, but then she suddenly changes to being accepting of him and dancing in front of him and everything. I can see her being in awe of his music, but it seems like she is suddenly at ease and okay with being around him. Her anger comes and goes, and she randomly goes from fury to intimacy. And the fact that she accepts him so easily in the end threw me off a bit.

The dialogue is a bit iffy. I can see the Phantom speaking in an archaic way (he's apparently been around for goodness knows how long) but Christiana is apparently of the modern generation (figuring from her Disney reference), so when she starts speaking in the same old, proper manner as the Phantom, when earlier she had been more modern, it throws off the believability factor. Keep their methods of speaking consistent.

Also, I'm assuming that Christiana is French, if she is the great-granddaughter of the other Christine and considering she understands the Phantom, who is French. (yes, I realize the story is in English) But some of Christiana's language (namely "buddy" and "airhead") sound very harshly American. I realize that they could be translations of other, more French words, but if you could find another word that sends the same image but is not so regionalized. It's a small nitpick, but it really bothered me.

Anyway, I feel for Erik. I always felt bad for him, the way he lost the girl, but now he's trying to make it better. Seems like you're going for the good route for him. I hope it all works out. Though I still think Christine should have dumped Raoul and gone with Erik. (Big Bad Bear has the funniest avatar dealing with that at the moment, if you haven't already seen it - look him up here on YWS and laugh)

Good luck with this! *thumbs up*

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I absolutely adore the Phantom of the opera. this is an intereting take on the Phantom's persona, as i always thought of him as being a very suave and austere. However you have put him in a futuristic situation where he has been trapped for year, so i suppose that would make him a little less like that. Cristiana confuses me a bit, I agree she changes her emotions too quickly, and I don't know why, or understand it. You need to give us reasons, or we're going to be confused.
this whole concept is very clever thoug, and i did enjoy it. You have a good writing style, and it's very easy to follow and understand, except for the fact that you need to work on your charactors. Think about how the audience will read it, even if you understand your charactors fully, you need to make sure we will.
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