A letter to a belove'ed reader

**Not really my best poem ever, but i have never tried writing a poem in this style before. So it's all just a bit of a case of trial and error**
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Dearest reader, take solace in my words,
Floodgates now open my thoughts unheard.
To you I dedicate a hard earned teaching,
Listen if you want it, I’ll do no preaching.

Labels are redundant ways to remove,
Someone, who the masses won’t approve.

Come now oh’ children let’s reveille,
Our voices to us were given rightly.
For to give us something to say,
Let nobody mute you not even slightly.

Strength in unity for the good of our cause,
Make your decision like the water to horse.
A single mind can make us happy due,
All that’s required is removing all that is you.

God has no power in a changing existence,
Yesterday’s graces are today’s indecorous.

Alas I draw to a close, as my time has ended.
Follow my precepts and your life need not be mended.

yummy.
i like this.

puntuation and stuff's not great, though.
(punctuation fixed below)

Dearest reader, take solace in my words;
Floodgates now open my thoughts unheard.
To you I dedicate a hard earned teaching;
Listen if you want it, I’ll do no preaching.

Labels are redundant ways to remove
Someone who the masses won’t approve.

Come now o’ children, let’s reveille.
Our voices to us were given rightly
For to give us something to say:
Let nobody mute you, not even slightly.

Strength in unity for the good of our cause.
Make your decision like the water to horse.
A single mind can make us happy due;
All that’s required is removing all that is you.

God has no power in a changing existence;
Yesterday’s graces are today’s indecorous.

Alas, I draw to a close as my time has ended.
Follow my precepts and your life need not be mended.




other than that, there's grammatical errors and made-up words that are almost nonsensical in the context,
plus, some bad rhymes.



but, keep it up.
you had a great idea, but it could be improved upon.

Hola!

Firstly, the title didn't really drag me in. I think it was mostly because it was addressed to the actual reader and I was like "...why am I being called upon?" Now for content since the punctuation has already been fixed.

Dearest reader, take solace in my words,

Floodgates now open my thoughts unheard.

To you I dedicate a hard earned teaching,

Listen if you want it, I’ll do no preaching.

**I like this first stanza. Easy to read and easy to understand. The way it is written your words are what make it beautiful.

Labels are redundant ways to remove,

Someone, who the masses won’t approve.

**This sort of threw me off. Two lines. But I looooooooved these two lines. They're my favorite. It's just so true and so simple. Great job.

Come now oh’ children let’s reveille,

Our voices to us were given rightly.

For to give us something to say,

Let nobody mute you not even slightly.

**Now this is where I was tongue twisted and confused and eventually skipped this part because it didn't compare to your above lines in the slightest. The meaning, I do get it. Try to reword it. You're language as I said, is beautiful. But don't try to put it on too thick. Simplicity like your other lines makes for a better outcome.


Strength in unity for the good of our cause,

Make your decision like the water to horse.

A single mind can make us happy due,

All that’s required is removing all that is you.

**Cause and horse don't rhyme, no matter how hard I tried to pull it off (accent and everything) it just didn't work. And plus, you are consistantly changing your rhyme pattern. This was okay in the first two stanzas but after that things look scattered and I find it had to focus on the meaning of the poem instead of trying to reset my mind to a different tempo each stanza. That's just too much going on at once.


God has no power in a changing existence,

Yesterday’s graces are today’s indecorous.

**Also, love. Simple. Means a lot. This is your place you should stick with it through the poem.

Alas I draw to a close, as my time has ended.

Follow my precepts and your life need not be mended.

**Last line too long. First line is worded funny. So together they LOOK like they don't make sense but they really do.

Overall great poem. Needs to be tuned, and watch out for the rhyme schemes you have jumping all over the place. Remember simple is better.

Happy editing!
~Rieda