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Okay, so I'm out of work until August so I have so much free time on my hand it hurts. Please relieve me of my pain and give me some pieces to critique!

All pieces offered up will be given the attention they deserve.

I will critique:
- Action/adventure fiction
- Fantasy fiction (I absolutely love fantasy!)
- Mild science fiction
- Other Fiction
- Romantic Fiction
- Historical Fiction

I cannot critique:
- Poetry. I'm kind inexperienced in this area...you don't want me here.
- Lyrics
- Scripts
- Fanfiction

I'll focus on anything, including grammar and style, characterization, emotion, plot flow and development... any specific requests to be paid attention to, just tell me!

In return: Nothing! Just sign my guest book, tell me something amusing. Or if you're feeling overly generous you can review something of mine. Not necessary in the slightest though. I just feel like reviewing.

Post the link here, or PM me.

Thanks bunches, muah! I hope you reward me with your stories offered up for the reviewing. :D

~ Clo
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Oooh, first response for Clo! XD

Goddess Fallen

I'd appreciate anything you can give me on this one. It's a scene I came up with that was really the starting point for a novel idea.
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Yay, first up!

Anyone else? I'm bored and ready to review to your heart's content! :D
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Anyone else? These are free reviews! All you have to do is ask. ^_^
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if you could have a look at this one that would be good :) if you have the time..which you do seem to so...

topic32572.html

thanks :)
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Could you please critique this one:

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It's science-fiction, though I don't know if it would be described as mild...
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Okay, I just reviewed both of your pieces! Thanks, guys!

Any other callers? ^_^
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Hello? *echo... echo.... echo*
:P
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Night Terrors

I have just posted this and wondered if I could get some reviews?
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Would love help on this.




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Ok, your done, BBB!

Still open for business. :D
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hey clo, i don't know how to do a link yet, but it is in my portfolio under "Canaby Witches" Chapters 1-5 it is fantasy fiction and people seem to like them all so please and thankyou :D

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Okay, I have one that's short on reviews. It's either the prologue or first chapter, I'm not sure which yet, to a fantasy story. I have a problem with dialog, so if you could help me out on that it would be great. And I'll mail the cookies to you as soon as I can.

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And can I say that I love your avatar and siggie?
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Okay, I reviewed the both of you guys. ^_^

Still open for requests.
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XD I agree, I love the avatar. Kitties!

Anyways, please and thank you for reviewing this. ^_^ It's for my class and I want to make it as good as possible.
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Hi!

Could you please do this for me? topic33149.html

Thanks!
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[Firearris] 10:45 pm: askes the guard for the weasel!
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