Alone With The Sky

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Yeah, I'll be another person to say don't stop, especially at 13. Anyways I was gonna say you have something here, just some unnecessary words. And I think Medusa's critique says it all. When you take out those words and read it the poem goes from ok, to very good. So, keep it up, because all poets rework their stuff, whether it's themselves, or someone like Medusa giving that editorial push.
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If you stop writing poetry because you think you're not good enough...
I think I might shoot myself.

Okay, maybe I'm being a little dramatic.
But you're not gonna be amazing straightaway.
And you're already pretty darn close.

So...
Don't try to tell us that you suck
Because no one's gonna believe you.

And one more thing:
Don't tear yourself down before you even give us a chance to judge it for ourselves.
Okay?

Now I've gotta go read more....
"...she was a lovely lady, with a romantic mind and such a sweet mocking mouth..."

- 'Peter Pan' by J.M. Barrie




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Haha. Thanks everybody.

I guess I was just having a bit of a bad day...
"The difference between the right word and almost the right word is the difference between lightning and the lightning bug." -Mark Twain



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— L.M. Montgomery, Anne of Green Gables