Can It Be?

I love this piece. The description of Alan is well done! Personally, I regret that is was so short. I truly think you should expand this story to be longer. It would be even more enjoyable if there was more information and interaction between the characters.

My only other suggestion is to maybe break up some of the paragraphs, and add some dialogue. Overall, it was a very nice short read.

It is short and sweet. Good for light reading. I liked the decription of Alan.

I smiled as his beautiful green eyes locked on mine. He smiled as a lock of his straight black hair fell from his forehead.

You might want to devlop the characters more to make it more intersting and expand if you want to. Other than that not much problems.

Thats such a sweet story. I love the part where she finally gets her dream. I'm sorry, but I love romance stories and a good one is hard to come by. For a short story, I give you praise because I stayed interested and didn't get bored. Good job. I enjoyed reading it.

Its every girls dream. Its a good little story to put into words every girl's daydream, and the fact that it ended with the fairytale ending was so predictable it almost surprised me. I liked it overall, but thought it was a bit too ordinary, and could use a little something to set it apart from other stories.

That was good! I liked how decriptive it was.