new peice --- The Pit.

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Something new, I've never written about anything like this. Hope you like it. Should I keep going on it?
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The Pit.



They say that when you go psycho you don’t know it, but I did. I knew when I started to loose control. They say you don’t know but I always did.
Before the pit I was living in my one room apartment and I was happy. I had friends, a great job, and a hot girlfriend. I really did have the life you live to have. But when I started to dive down into a hole that you could never come back from I lost it all.
Now I’m in the pit. The pit is a place that crazy people go when they’ve hit rock bottom. I was one of those people. They locked me up and threw away the key. I can’t remember what I did that night but I will find out, one way or another.

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“Hey! Yeah, you move.” Said a man with long unruly grey hair and a face you don’t want to look at.
“Why, am I sitting on your needle?” I said with a pinch of amusement.
“ Ah you son of a bitch, you better watch your back son!” At this point he was screaming at me a few feet from the table I was sitting at.
I still didn’t move and he was starting to come closer. I knew that the monitors were watching this whole conversation and getting a kick out of it. But they would step in soon before things got out of control, which would be soon probably.
“Oh Gregg be nice to me please, I might cry.” I’m really trying to control myself but I need to have some fun once in a while.
He started to lift his right fist at me when one of the monitors yelled “Gregg, sit down and eat now!”
You craysee!.? Me, do, too, use, correct english fool.




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“Hey! Yeah, you move.” Said a man with long unruly grey hair and a face you don’t want to look at.

Is it suppose to sound odd when the man speaks?

Well, other then that it was quite interesting. The problem was it felt to short. I scrolled down to read more and ti was already over.

It could just be short, that can work too, but I just wanted to let you know...

Gosh I am really bad a reviewing!
Don't listen to me if I sound stupid.
XD

I really liked it!




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This is only a very short fragment of the beginning, and yes he is supposed to sound a little wierd or crazy...
You craysee!.? Me, do, too, use, correct english fool.




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I like this but I don't really know what's going on... Is he in an insane asylum? I'm confused but I hope you write more so I can figure this out... :D

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Ashlee :D
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I like this a lot but I don't really know whats going on... Is he in an insane-asylum? I hope you write more so I can figure this out... It's really good so far though.

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Ashlee :D
"I fall asleep in hospital parking lots." -Hello Seattle, Owl City




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Yes he is, that's The Pit. The plot sort of goes...
The guy is crazy. He did somethig that got him in "The Pit", but he doesn't know what he did. I think the story is going to be him trying to figure out what he did and how he can get out. I think this story would go under Mystery/Action/Thriller.
You craysee!.? Me, do, too, use, correct english fool.



I’d heard he had started a fistfight in one of the seedier local taverns because someone had insisted on saying the word “utilize” instead of “use".
— Patrick Rothfuss, A Wise Man's Fear