Dream Catcher Chapters #1 and #2

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tension///
The clock to my right was striking midnight. It was dark and I was alone with my dreamer. Before I decide to wake her up I need to know if she’s in danger. I was just observing while the dreamer was walking down a stone path. She seemed content but I could tell there was fear hidden behind her mask.
She walked and walked. I didn’t sense any danger nearby or around any curves in the path. But as soon as I thought that a man passed me. He didn’t know I was there, I don’t affect the nightmare at all. He was wearing a black jacket, jeans, and boots that made faint clicks as he walked.
The girl knew he was there. She knew but she didn’t show it, she didn’t speed up or slow down, tense up or look behind her. I saw a flash of silver in the man’s hand. I looked harder and saw it was a dagger.
The girl stopped flat. She just stood there breathing calmly. I was confused. Usually they freak out, run, scream anything! But no she sat there and didn’t move.
I blinked and the man with the dagger was gone. He disappeared from my sight. The girl turned around and looked me straight in the eye. I was paralyzed. She walked toward me. I tried to do my thing and wake her up but nothing happened. She kept coming closer and closer, I tried to back away or get out but I couldn’t I was stuck in her dream.
When she got to me she leaned in and for a second I thought she was going to kiss me but she didn’t. All she did was whisper.
"You think you have control…but you don’t."


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confusion and clouds///
I was walking down a street in a calm daydream. I think the dreamer was a teenager. He was probably male because there were girls on the corner and they didn’t look like girl scouts.
I was just walking and thinking. I was thinking about the girl and what she said. Who was she? I thought she was a dreamer, maybe she was. I’ve never been noticed in a nightmare or a dream. It scared me a little. I’ve always had complete control.
I looked up to see one lonely cloud floating in the sky. It was plump and the purest white. I took another step but when my foot landed it wasn’t on the street, it was on the fat puffy cloud I saw.
There she was. The girl who’s cause so much stress in my mind. She just stood there like last time I saw her with her back to me.
I could see her more clearly now. She had bright blonde hair that fell to her shoulders. She was wearing a plain white dress that made her skin glow against all of the white. She was small, maybe five feet. She looked like she was about ten years old, but it felt like she was older.
She turned around and I felt my heart rate pick up and my body become more still. I could see her face now, she had soft features to match her body. She made a motion that meant to come to her.
I went and she sat down. She looked up at me and then I sat down too. She looked straight into the sea blue sky. I was staring at her and then she said
follow me!
I was so confused and then she fell straight threw the cloud. I looked down but the hole was already sealed up. I started to feel heavy and then I fell through the cloud too. I was falling threw the air. I was falling faster and faster away from the big, lonely cloud in the sky.




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Like I said before, you are a very good writer. I like the female character. Is she a dream catcher, too? Anyways,

I was walking down a street in a calm daydream. I think the dreamer was a teenager. He was probably male because there were girls on the corner and they didn’t look like girl scouts.


This particular section caught my eye. The male character is witty and he seems to have a genuine personality about him. I like how you put what he was thinking in. It makes the story more real.


You are doing an excellent job. I look forward to reading more! :D

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Ashlee :lol:
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Thanks I loved that part too being a 13 year old boy.
You craysee!.? Me, do, too, use, correct english fool.




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I have the WHOLE story under "Dream catcher---".
You craysee!.? Me, do, too, use, correct english fool.




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GoOsE BuMpS AGAIN!! :D :D :D
Does the guy ever wake up? I mean is he dreaming throughout the entire story?
Don't get me wrong, I love the way you're going with this, but I personally would like to see what his life is like beyond the dreams.
Anyway, I enjoyed it!! It's really good so far. Keep it up, and let me know when theres more to read!!
And I really wanna know more about this girl!! It's got me so curious, so hurry up already. 8) 8) 8)

~Mandy~
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He never really "wakes up", he can't. He is the only dream catcher so he is always controlling dreams...maybe I'll add some type of twist???
You craysee!.? Me, do, too, use, correct english fool.



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