i woke up with you in my arms
with a smile as wide as you
on my face.
do you remember when i won you
when the stars were red and the night was red
they were watching with nervous glances
and everybody sung for you
and everybody sung for us.
do you remember when i held you
when everything was flashing and bright
when they all wanted a taste of you
and they all got to kiss you
but you were mine that night
do you remember when i had to let you go
for a fleeting second before you came back
this time forever in my cabinet
the last time you felt alive
i wasn't even born.
do you remember when i won you
on that unforgettable night
that awe-inspiring, unforgettable night
in istanbul when the stars were red
and the world sang for us.
because i'll never forget what you said
in the fantasies of sleep, when all was lost
the future belongs to those who dare to dream.
It's just really confusing and you need to sort some things out. I'm sure it'll be good once you make some changes. I think you have a great idea here, Jack, you just need to think about it a little bit more. You seemed to just put down whatever came to your mind and it made it seem weird. Be sure to go through it and make everything more clearly. I think this would also be better as a story, but that's just my opinion.
