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LoveableLittleSock · 2008-05-16T17:27:01Z

Hey - just got back a week or two again and have just begun posting on YWS again. I've improved a lot, and I'm eager to see what everybody's been doing while I've been gone. I won't procrastinate like I did, so bring them on! Warning I'm harsh. I'm very harsh. I'm not super-mean, like, I won't tell you your story sucks and you should never write again. Sometimes I will comment on every single paragraph/scene or go into extreme grammar nitpicking mode and annoy the hell out of you. I will be blunt and honest, so don't be offended if you see a, "This paragraph sucks. Let's fix it!" Under some passage that you spend two hours on (hopefully that won't be the case, though!) If you don't want me to be super-harsh and want me to tone down my attitude a little, I'll try my best to sugarcoat everything. I don't want to scare anybody away =] Of course, if I absolutely love whatever you've written, don't get angry if I can't find anything to nitpick or improve. It happens! Recently, I reviewed a chapter for my friend on here, and I just kept saying, "I hate this. I hate this. I hate your protagonist. I hate this dialogue." So expect such things - just remember that I will never ever tell you something like, "You can't write," or "You're a bad writer." Two statements that are completely uncalled for in any context. I will say, "You can't write dialogue," =] But I'm honest, so don't come running at me with a knife if you can't take it. Let me try to get the link to that critique up here.. Examples These are the most recent, and perfect examples of my wimpiness and my harshness. Check them out: HARSH The Real Life Story of a Girl (Teddybear22) Heartsick - Chapter One (springrain2693) WIMP Vicissitudes - Tyler (Bickazer) So check those out if you wish. Anyway, let's get to the genres I do and don't review! I REVIEW: Romance Realistic Fiction Historical Fiction Fantasy Action/Adventure Fiction Poetry (Lyrical or Narrative) Scripts I DON'T REVIEW: Science Fiction Specific kinds of Poetry (like Epic) Fan Fiction Song Lyrics Art & Photography Non-Fiction (Essays, etc.) I will also do Advanced Critiques (check out the forum if you don't know what those are), but it might take a while. Moving on, thanks for checking out my little business and I hope you give me something to [s]tear apart [/s]review! ~*Sara*~

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Wed Nov 12, 2008 10:41 pm

LoveableLittleSock says... · Wed Nov 12, 2008 10:41 pm

Melkor, I finished your story. I took me forever, I must say. Go check it out!

~*Sara*~

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Wed Nov 12, 2008 11:08 pm

Sureal says... · Wed Nov 12, 2008 11:08 pm

You're harsh? That intrigues me.

I'd really appreciate (as in, really really appreciate) a critique of Chapter One of The Broken. =)

Feel free to rip it apart and bathe in its gory remains.

Thankee in advance.

I wrote the above just for you.

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Thu Nov 13, 2008 2:52 pm

melkor says... · Thu Nov 13, 2008 2:52 pm

LoveableLittleSock wrote:Melkor, I finished your story. I took me forever, I must say. Go check it out!

~*Sara*~

Yup.
and it was the best darn critique I ever had....

It wasn't that strict though...

"He felt that his whole life was some kind of dream and he sometimes wondered whose it was and whether they were enjoying it. "
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Thu Nov 13, 2008 3:30 pm

LoveableLittleSock says... · Thu Nov 13, 2008 3:30 pm

What could I possibly have been strict about? It was fine. Go sulk in a corner and deal with it.

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Sat Nov 15, 2008 9:52 pm

Bickazer says... · Sat Nov 15, 2008 9:52 pm

If you're still doing this...

Could you look at the fourth and fifth Vicissitudes story? I'm getting saddened by the lack of reviews. >_>

topic38433.html

topic38715.html

And please be harsh. Espeically with the sixth one. It's the worst one I've written, I feel...

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Wed Nov 19, 2008 12:45 am

Jon says... · Wed Nov 19, 2008 12:45 am

*CoughChp.8Cough* oops

Chp. nine too?

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Thu Nov 20, 2008 4:47 pm

LoveableLittleSock says... · Thu Nov 20, 2008 4:47 pm

Sureal, Bickazer and Wisemann, I shall get to your stories super-soon. But can everybody do me a favor and only give me one at a time? =] It takes me long enough to do one. But feel free to ask for the next one when I'm done with the first.

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Fri Nov 21, 2008 11:50 pm

Jon says... · Fri Nov 21, 2008 11:50 pm

I knew you would be an instructor!

was i the force driving that, perhaps?

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Sat Nov 22, 2008 4:34 pm

LoveableLittleSock says... · Sat Nov 22, 2008 4:34 pm

Maybeh =]

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Sat Nov 22, 2008 5:39 pm

CastlesInTheSky says... · Sat Nov 22, 2008 5:39 pm

Hello there!
Do you think you could be awesome and review 'On Broken Wings,' in advanced critiques: post453828.html#453828
At your harshest, please. :wink:

*cowers*

Thankyou so much, and please tell me if it's too much trouble. ^_^ You're obviously loaded down with crit requests at the moment.

Sarah
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Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.

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Tue Dec 02, 2008 10:00 pm

LoveableLittleSock says... · Tue Dec 02, 2008 10:00 pm

Sureal, I finished yours. Go take a look!

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Wed Dec 03, 2008 12:37 am

KailaMarie says... · Wed Dec 03, 2008 12:37 am

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic39491.html

This was part of my NaNoWriMo, and I really wanted to see if it had the right mood, so I'd love a critique. Be as harsh as you need to be! I won't cry. Promise.

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Wed Dec 10, 2008 5:04 pm

CastlesInTheSky says... · Wed Dec 10, 2008 5:04 pm

Hi,

Sorry, maybe the link didn't work in my post above. It was: topic39009.html

Thanks a lot!

-Sarah

Had I the heavens embroider'd cloths,
I would spread the cloths under your feet.
But I being poor, have only my dreams,
So tread softly, for you tread on my life.

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Thu Dec 11, 2008 11:44 am

melkor says... · Thu Dec 11, 2008 11:44 am

LoveableLittleSock wrote:What could I possibly have been strict about? It was fine. Go sulk in a corner and deal with it.

~*Sara*~

I could think of various things...

as opposed to sulking....I'll just do my angry passionate glare....

"He felt that his whole life was some kind of dream and he sometimes wondered whose it was and whether they were enjoying it. "
"It is a mistake to think you can solve any major problems just with potatoes."
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Fri Dec 12, 2008 11:43 pm

anti-pop says... · Fri Dec 12, 2008 11:43 pm

Hi, LoveableLittleSock! *shakes hand*

Ok, so I'm officially intimidated.
Here's a short romance:
topic40024.html

Oh geez. I saw your HARSH example and whimpered. It's bad to start a story with dialouge?? ARGH. Ah well...
I'm mainly asking you to do this because I want to see if I have the guts to take a harsh review.
I appreciate this very much

So, *takes deep breath* do your worst. *faints*

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changing holds
cynicism the new norm...
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