Shadows on our skin

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We both on either side of them.
Railings. Walls. Parallels
that the eye can’t see,
but the hand can feel.
Reach out to the other side,
and bang. Fingers burnt, mind deceived.

They say that things are changing,
but the flicker of flying material,
still stings the ears, and the drum
battles with bangs that tail the dreams.

Live and let live,
die and let go.
That’s what they say,
but when you look down at your palm,
and my palm. They don’t seem the same.

How can you move on,
and live with the regret?
The bitter tang of dates and tolls,
and tit for tat. This for that.
A bomb for a plea.
Religions fight against each other,
No faith in one another.

The trouble in may be over,
but when you stop to hear the silence
between the uneasy laughs…
You’ve been saying them since
you were born into this madness.
No surrender.
We shall have home rule.
Send them in, drive them out.

Shadows on our skin.
Last edited by Eimear on Tue May 13, 2008 3:32 pm, edited 1 time in total.
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars.

Oscar Wilde.




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Wow. I almost have no idea what that said, in a good way. It left an imprint on my mind of a message that I'll be learning later in life, I know it.

Terrific job, you earn a gold star, right off the bat!




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Thanks for the great review

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We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars.

Oscar Wilde.




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Hey E :)

You remember when I told you it's hard for me to review your work? Well, I can proudly say that I've figured out the reason: They're so good. Really, I think the poem is good if you can't tell right away what's it about (SDT :)) And well, your poems are like that.

"Live and let live,
die and let go.
That’s what they say,
but when you look down at your palm,
and my palm. They don’t seem the same."

My favourite stanza! Keep writing, I'll keep reading!

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Demeter
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