Dawning

Thank you everyone for the compliments and critiques.
Sol is Latin (and Spanish) for "sun."

I will work on the last couplet at the end. ^ _ ~

Once again, I appreciate all of the comments I am getting!

- Summerless <3~

Very picturesque, I like it! The rhythm took a little working out in my head, but I love the way you worded it all! Great job!

Picturesque? Nice word :]

Thank you, ChildofEden, for the compliments and I'll work a little more on the rhythm.

- Summerless <3

I really don't see where you're going with this. I like the rhyming and rhythm, though. I just don't see the meaning in this. Also, I'd like to point out a problem with your first stanza:

Crisp, the rising, is the suppressed sol,
Bind seasons' promises compelled you to keep,
Laugh, cerise lips, on the jade knoll,
Slow over the fruitless, undulance of sleep.

"sol", and "knoll", I don't think they're words. Try to find other words to put in place of them.

Try to expand this and add more details into this to show the meaning. I hope this helps!

-Rick.

I am impressed. Your use of imagery is great and the rhyming works out very well. It's the first work of yours that I read, but I will definitely keep reading

Great work...
What's striking about this is its positivity; your outlook on life (or the world, or whatever) seems to be really optimistic, and not satisfied to dwell on the negative. That's unusual in poetry, of every kind.
Your imagery's beautiful:

''Enchant the land euphoric and serene''...
''Allure the unknowing with beauty of green''.

Whats strange is that these aren't particularly unusual images, but they do appear perfect and celestial in the context of the poem, which is great. They're powerful, put simply.

Hmm... I hate reviewing something without leaving critiscm and a way to improve, but to be honest I don't have one. That's a sign of great work methinks!

sigh.. I'm sad. There's nothing for me to help you with. Other than a good review of this. Its really great. I just love the way you use the words so creativly ^_^



I give you an A+

That was great!! I loved the way that you used metephors and extensive word choice. An excellent piece - keep writing!

Wow.
All I can say is wow.
Like others have said, your rhymes are fabulous. Whenever I try to rhyme, it makes my poems pretty lame because it doesn't even make sense. Haha...

I looooove all your vocabulary words. Awesome. You sure have a way with words!

Kudos to you!

~Mateeah

I’m not that familiar with sonnets, so I don’t know if this is good or bad, but the rhythm was off.

Also, sometimes I didn’t quite understand what was happening. But that’s some of the magic of a poem.

Bury not truths you find as lies rotten;

Love that line,
This is a lovely poem. The more you read it, the more you understand.

Keep writing!
-Y