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1) does it draw my attention?
yes it does. it was very interesting, but the vocabulary was just a little bland. I think what drew me in the most was you attacking Mr. Duckworth.

2)Character Development?
She seems very interesting. Somehow reminiscent of a certain someone, but not too much. Just a taste.

3)Other thoughts?
burritos. and I really like your writing.




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AH! Everyone! This is supposed to be attatched to the "Yarn-prologue"

Me: -___- attacking Mr. Duckworth was self defense of my writing, this is not yet a good working piece for me, so I was working on it. And still am! So therefore Mr. Duckworth shouldn't be allowed to read it in my prescence.




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Wtf??? i have absolutely NO clue wht ur talking about :smt064
Why did you hit me?" he groaned groggily, blinking like an owl.

"Why are you in my bed!?" I countered, wriggling in embarrassment.




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I think this was supposed to be posted as a review here.

I'll see if I can get a Mod to lock this thread.

~Azila~




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