To Be invisible

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Imagine that you are a helpless child,
Young rambunctious and wild.
Living in a place were you cold be taken into the bush
And be lost forever
At
Any
Time

To walk around in shoes that don’t fit,
Meanwhile over an iPod you are throwing a fit.
Wishing your parents understood you.
Try living in an orphanage
Where your parents died of AIDS
In a place that you can’t get aid
Because no one cares about you
Because you are invisible.

Running everywhere at night to find a spot,
Or else you'll be caught.
Trained and brainwashed
Like a robot.
Only taught to kill,
And kill,
And kill,
You try to hold your tears in
Or else you’ll be butchered on the spot.

How ‘bout being a casualty
In a war that’s not yours to fight.

Appreciate the house you live,
The bed you sleep, and all the thought that you are aloud to keep.
Some children aren’t so lucky.
They sleep in damp corridors,
Hoping tat they are not the one for Joseph to take.

You probably didn’t know all this.
You could pick up a paper and find it,
All you’ll see is celebrity babies
And Paris getting a DUI.
Why don’t they show a picture of a baby?
Starved ‘till his mouth was dry.
Who cares about Paris and her DUI?

Why will no one cross the line?
Why no one dares to care?
It because they don’t notice,
Seen though like a cellophane wrapper.
But someone saw,
Three young American guys who went beyond themselves
To see a war the ceased to exist.
They documented
And they didn’t care if they were never to be seen
As long as the story was told.

To be invisible
Is to not be seen
Those children are not invisible,
Just no one wants to see them.
Lets open our eyes.
Character is what you have left when you've lost everything you can lose. - Evan Esar
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A few great issues raised here, although I'm undecided as to whether or not I liked the structure. Nice work though.

What does everyone else think?

Eimear
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars.

Oscar Wilde.




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