A Sonnet to My Moose

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A Sonnet to My Moose

A courtship with my antlered friend,
this, my love at first sight.
I know my obsession won’t end.
I prevent it with all my might.

A tall, bellowing, brown, antlered moose,
my singular of many meese.
And why shouldn’t the plural of moose
be the same as goose, whose plural is geese?

Because, when I decide to choose
my moose over meese, he will be
the tallest and loudest with big hooves,
and he will offer his back to little me

So that I may use his antlers for rest,
and be his Queen of the Forest




Kind of silly and imperfect I know. But I love meese. ^_^ So I wrote a sonnet to them. :D It isn't a Shakespearian sonnet though. I had a hard enough time getting everything to sort of rhyme let alone trying to get iambic pentameter in there. :lol: By the way, the typical rhyme scheme of a sonnet (such as this one) is ABAB, CDCD, EFEF, GG. So tada! One of Yoyo's *few* rhymig poems. ^_^
~Yoyo 8)
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Cute, but not quite a sonnet because there's no iambic pentameter. But I commend you on trying to rhyme throughout. Like I said, it's a cute poem, and kind of funny, but it's not quite a sonnet.

yoha_ahoy wrote:And why shouldn’t the plural of moose
be the same as goose, whose plural is geese?


I agree. The English language is so weird sometimes...

I really couldn't find anything wrong spelling-wise, grammar-wise, or anything else-wise, so great job! You made it easy for me to crit!

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yoha_ahoy wrote:So that I may use his antlers for rest,
and be his Queen of the Forest
Ouch. XD That is one forced rhyme, if I've ever heard one! I would say that "forest" rhymes better with "florist" and "rest" would rhyme better with "best" or "nest." You could say "use his antlers as a nest" XD No, no, no, I am not a poet. :D

Anyway, that was the only rhyme problem that I found. I envy those who can do poetry, I would get so confused with the rhythm and everything. *sigh*

Nice sonnet, YoYo!




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Meese make great subject matter! I really liked this poem; awesome work!




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LOL.

I love its digressions. ;)
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That is adorable:) I love it!

Meese... now I'll be calling mooses meese for the rest of my days:) lol

Eah, who cares about iambic pentimeter? This is great!

*stars*


Keep writing,

*adna*
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Hahaha, I'm reviewing your sonnet since you reviewed mine. First of all, it was humorous. I love the "meese" and "geese" part. I'm adding it to my imaginary dictionary.

Sorry for such a short review. I am not an expert on sonnets. Thank you for reviewing mine, and your first sonnet if swell.

Hope to read more writing from you in the future.

~ Summer




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this was the most perfect thing I've ever read, haha. thanks for it.



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