Miss me?

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Play catch with my heart
I don't care.
So long as you're right there to catch it.
Will you catch it?

Tell me that you'll catch it
tell me in truth please.
Or will you just watch it fall
and shattter at your feet?
Is that the proof that you don't miss me?

Chorus
I really cannot see
the part of you that's missing me.
So do you really miss me?
Or am I just letting myself make believe?

Don't throw away my heart,
it doesn't belong in the trash.
If you don't want it,
if you won't let it last,
just give it back.

You play catch with my heart
and I don't care.
You're about to let my heart drop
don't you dare!
If it goes down it's gone forever,
do you want me to hate you forever?

Chorus

If you miss me
catch my heart
and don't throw it back.

It belongs with you,
or it belongs with me
there is no inbetween.
Give me back my heart please,
unless you really miss me.
I just lost the game.




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Yay! More of Alice's lyrics! XD

This one was pretty good, Alice. I like some of the rhyming you have in there. My only problem is the last line. ...I"m not so sure I like it...
It doesn't sound/fit quite right.

Anywho, yet another good song (lyrics) from Alice!

Keep Writing!
~Timea
"Look, Ma. No hands"
"You haven't got a ma."
"Maybe a nice old lady will adopt me. I'm very loveable."
―Fi and Darman




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Hello Alice!
I acutally liked it!
It was very good, and pretty deep.
I hope you write some more!




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wow Alice this lyric was so beautiful! I ALMOST cried and usually I hate it when people have that effect on me. This was so good that I'm actually speechless. Shut me up before I start to ramble.

-Max
We're meant to be one
I know we are...
If I am the Sky
Then you are my star... ™




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I love this! It's amazing! I love the feeling and emotion. It seemed a bit repetitive, but I really like it! It's amazing! Keep up the good writing. I do agree though, it's a bit sad, but the emotion is amazing! Keep up the good work! XD




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I liked it, i just, dunno, didn't really feel it

I got the idea but there's just something missing

That may just be me, im into imagery, and for this kind of song, you dont really use imagery, so its just me being picky =P

The lyrics worked very well, the idea was great and the way you pieced the two together worked very affectively.

The layout and the way you set it out wroks very well, it flows, its not repetetive, and the way you use the play catch with my heart really does work, making this very good.

Even though it's not really my thing, i still really enjoyed it, so obviously yor doing somethig very right =]]

Great, i shall be lookingout for more, Eva XxXxX
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