I bite hard.

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Griffinkeeper
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Wed Mar 26, 2008 8:23 pm
Griffinkeeper says... · Wed Mar 26, 2008 8:23 pm
Want something critiqued by a semi-amateur professional? Just post a link of your story below. Note: I only critique stories, poetry is my weak point.
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Autumn
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Wed Mar 26, 2008 8:50 pm
Autumn says... · Wed Mar 26, 2008 8:50 pm
A critique would be much appreciated! :)

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But there's still tomorrow
Forget the sorrow
And I can be on the last train home




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Thu Mar 27, 2008 3:34 am
Griffinkeeper says... · Thu Mar 27, 2008 3:34 am
Done!
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chocoholic
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Fri Mar 28, 2008 9:49 am
chocoholic says... · Fri Mar 28, 2008 9:49 am
Because I want this to be the best story I can make it,

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topic27483.html

Thanks a lot!
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Jennafina
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Sat Mar 29, 2008 5:28 am
Jennafina says... · Sat Mar 29, 2008 5:28 am
I would love a harsh critique! I just edited.

Benedict's Goodbye

Btw, my title is awful. If you have any ideas for a better, that would be awesome too. Thanks, Grif. :)
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Sat Apr 05, 2008 4:33 am
omgafilangi says... · Sat Apr 05, 2008 4:33 am
It's from awhile ago, but I need something to work on, and I actually liked this idea. Go ahead, go nuts :)

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Wed Apr 09, 2008 3:41 pm
Griffinkeeper says... · Wed Apr 09, 2008 3:41 pm
Done, more?
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Wed Apr 09, 2008 3:57 pm
deleted6 says... · Wed Apr 09, 2008 3:57 pm
Chasing Rainbows: Chapter 1 (Revised)
Chasing Rainbows

I really want this to be the best it can be. :)


Plus:

The Final Soliloquy Of the General

I want to get this published as I feel it's my best short story :).
We get off to the rhythm of the trigger and destruction. Fallujah to New Orleans with impunity to kill. We are the hidden fist of the free market.
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Fri Apr 11, 2008 5:40 am
OverEasy says... · Fri Apr 11, 2008 5:40 am
Here are chapters 1 and 2 of my story.

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Wed May 21, 2008 10:07 pm
Twit says... · Wed May 21, 2008 10:07 pm
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Bite hard. Please?
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Wed May 21, 2008 10:11 pm
OverEasy says... · Wed May 21, 2008 10:11 pm
One more for me please?

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Mon May 26, 2008 9:40 pm
Esmé says... · Mon May 26, 2008 9:40 pm
Hey,

Would you mind doing a critique for me also? Here's the link:

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("Saving Michael", under Fantasy)


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Firearris
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Sat May 31, 2008 12:06 am
Firearris says... · Sat May 31, 2008 12:06 am
I don't think it's very good, but I'm looking for all the help i can get, so I can re-write it.

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Thanks!

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BigBadBear
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Sat May 31, 2008 6:08 am
BigBadBear says... · Sat May 31, 2008 6:08 am
Hey! I was wondering if you could check these out:

Pianissimo

Mezzo Forte

Thanks!

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Would love help on this.

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