Some Where Out There

Kix39 wrote:Look Out there
Way over there
Look Out there

I search And Search
All day and night
All to find nothing

But Someday I Will find it
What I'm looking for
The one thing that truly belongs

That One thing
I MUST find
Once I find it I will sing

That One thing I need
That one is is Love
I will find it, I will Succeed

I really don't like the rhythm and flow into this. Also, please don't cap workds either. Try to add some rhythm and add more details to explain what you're message is. Lastly, try to extend this poem. I hope this helps!

-Rick.

I liked the simplicity, but a little... detail... please? Also, first thing I noticed (as in, before I could even finish the first stanza) was the distracting caps. I mean, I'm into random (obviously) but the caps going crazy all over the poem totally threw me off.
Could you find a way to adapt the first stanza with the repeated "there"s too? I'm with Adnamarine, I like the idea of searching for love, and the writer feeling that so powerfully that they see it as something they HAVE to succeed at, but the repeated "there" is unecessary and annoying. Lastly, you have "is" repeated in the last stanza.
Besides that, I'd say you were right on! RG

IT was cool! I don't now how to correct poems but other wise it was good! The second to last line i think had a spelling error.