I liked this darling. It was very easy to read. It had a pleasant flow, and it was sad. Yet one is forced to wonder what the man behind the muscle is thinking---what motivates him? Does he enjoy what he does, or is he out of control, evey to himself?
it might be more interesting, more original, told from the man's point of view.
Or maybe you could blow off the whole "monster" steam, and write something about a girl who WANTS to be abused for one reason or another. That could be interesting...
idk, I'm just yammering the usual nonsense. But all in all, it was a nice read, very poetic. I think you've got talent. I think you should keep writing.
