Love and Joy

Love is an endless bound
With rays of hope and faith
Pouring out gracefully,
Over you and me.
Love is what you’ve given me,
Unconditionally and true
Just remember when I tell you,
You know it will always be true.
Joy is like a river
Surging with might and strength
Fighting the urge to fall.
Joy is what you’ve given me,
No matter what you do
Forever and always
You know it will always be true.
Mama I love you,
No matter what they say
Forever and always,
Even to this day.

This poem was short and sweet. I noticed you were trying to accomplish flow and sometimes it worked but other times the lines stuck out like sore thumbs.

Like here:

Love is an endless bound
With rays of hope and faith
Pouring out gracefully,
Over you and me.

Th last line doesn't connect to the rest of the lines, it's too short for the rhythm you had established.

And here:

Joy is like a river
Surging with might and strength
Fighting the urge to fall.
Joy is what you’ve given me,

You definitely need to break the last line into a different stanza, it doesn't relate to anything you were saying in the previous three lines and it breaks the rhythm shockingly. Overall I think if you broke the poem up into stanzas it would fix the odd lines and rhythm problem. Here's an example of what might work:

Love is an endless bound
With rays of hope and faith
Pouring out gracefully,
Over you and me.

Love is what you’ve given me,
Unconditionally and true
Just remember when I tell you,
You know it will always be true.

Joy is like a river
Surging with might and strength <<<<This is the only stanza that wouldn't work being separated every four lines. I suggest adding an extra line here to fix the rhythm.
Fighting the urge to fall.

Joy is what you’ve given me,
No matter what you do
Forever and always <<<Also, here
You know it will always be true. <<< and here you use the word "always" twice in close succession, the repetition is noticeable and it makes the word stale and meaningless when you use it all the time

Mama I love you,
No matter what they say
Forever and always,
Even to this day.

Overall it is a very nice poem, and I think if you make these small changes it will be great.

Keep it up!!

Loved this poem!
Did you actually give this poem to your mom for what ever day it was?
Well here are a few quotes:

Joy is like a river
Surging with might and strength

Absolutely adored thios stanza! The power and passiont tha that it brought was just phenominal!

Mama I love you,
No matter what they say
Forever and always,
Even to this day.

Loved these last few sentences!
Amazing work!
shanan-cat!

I actually loved this, it was really good and I think I'm going to give it my first ever star. Hmph. [Nodded triumphantly]

Okay, the one little niggly thing that I think got me a little was the fact that you snuck in a little rhyme every now and then but in the rest of the poem, it wasn't rhyming. I think this would work without any rhymes in it, because it's that kind of poem. I think the fact that the last four lines rhymed was quite good, but that should be the only time.

Other than that, I actually really liked this. The punctuation was a bit off in places but that can be easily fixed. You used some great imagery and the emotion that you infused through it really gets through to the reader.

Happy writing.
Ginge.

Your Mom should be proud of this. Who knows? Maybe it'll even make her cry!

it did.......though i dare say they were tears of joy...

Awww. that was so sweet. I really like the ending like the last three or four lines.

Very cute,

-- M.B.

Love is an endless bound - (bond)
With rays of hope and faith
Pouring out gracefully,
Over you and me. - .. what? If it has rays.. how does it pour out... and its a bond..
Love is what you’ve given me,
Unconditionally and true
Just remember when I tell you,
You know it will always be true. - The repetition of true.. eh.. sort of ruins that line
Joy is like a river
Surging with might and strength
Fighting the urge to fall. - Where would it fall? Over a waterfall?
Joy is what you’ve given me,
No matter what you do
Forever and always
You know it will always be true. - thaht line ruins the flow. "Always it will be true" would be better
Mama I love you,
No matter what they say
Forever and always,
Even to this day. - Even? Well of course now you do. What, she thinks you don't love her now?

You tried way to hard on this poem. The metaphors.. well, they all suck, really You're very descriptive though, but what you write is always very confusing. You should revise the poem and work on it more. Most of it makes no sense, so you have to make sure the readers KNOW what you're talking about most of the time.

KEEP WRITING!

This was a good poem. The ending made it worth it to read. You held the reades attention, which is always a good things. Also, I loved the emotion in this one. I could just see the love in this poem.

Nice work!

Hey!

I loved this, a very sweet poem.

No matter what they say

I reckon either a period or comma at the end here.

Fighting the urge to fall.

I would stick an 'and' at the start here.

I loved everything else, great poem! I really enjoyed that and I hope you write more!

~Mark

i thought it was nice
short sweet and two the point.