Part 1: Shattered Love, Chapter 2

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This is the continuation of chapter one, and I know it's really bad, so don't be mean about it, o.k?
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...It was Mick.

Mick was a fourteen, short brown hair and amazing eyes. Most werewolves had brown eyes, but not Mick, his were Blue and had vengeance written inside them, and stuck to his forehead.

Mick was also in waist deep love with the angel, and that was on thing that Edward couldn't stand for for even one minute.

Every time Mick tried to convince the angel that he was the one that she loved, she denied and moved on, leaving Mick alone and dangling like a petal on a lone flower. Maybe deep inside she did love him, but she didn't know it yet...

Mick was already in his werewolf shape and ready to have a good fight, while Edward was now a blood-sucking vampire, equipped to do harm.

Edward was ready to stop Mick once and for all, but the only thing that stopped him was the fact that there was a possibility that the angel loved him no more, in that case he wouldn't be able to stop him and his whole life would be crushed, and his love would be shattered.

The angel was on the ground and her breath was a small, while the marvelous glow that she had only a few moments ago, was now so faint, it could only light a bugs path, as she grew weak.

Mick was the first to attack, but Edward easily dodged it and threw him eight feet back without much effort thanks to his differences.

The fight continued, almost as if it would never end, but fortunately it did with an amazing win by Edward who only wore a small scratch on his cheek and a rip in his pants, but unfortunately for Mick, he was left in a puddle where he endured the pain of two broken bones and many bruises.

Edward left with the angel who had just awoken and was now regaining her energy, and was soon to return to her home, as Edward himself.

* * *

It's been two months since the horrible incidence with Mick, and ever since, they have never seen or smelt him around. Things were back to normal with the angel and Edward. Edward was still in love with the angel, and in return, she was with him.

Ever since the heartbreaking night, they would get together and sit in a park near Edward house and chat about what it'd be like if they went even farther in their relation ship...

Those questions and other things are what they talked about, they would also talk about what their love would be like if they didn't have special differences.

On one of those nights, Edward came with a small red box. The angel was surprised, but Edward was anxious as ever. He gave her the box and she opened it with, and almost dropped the box. Inside was a diamond necklace with a heart and a drop of Edward blood inside.

"Open your heart and I will be with you forever," he said so calmly. His words rand in the angles head, and he also had a wing hanging around his neck with a lock of her hair inside, to prove that they were now together forever. The two lovers were so deep in each others love that by the power of god, their souls were combined, and if broken, they would die together.

Weeks passed and the meet at a park close to Edward's neighbor hood, and talked together. The two were so perfect for each other that they had already thought about getting married when they each turned twenty, or when the angel turned thirteen, for vampires don't age because their hearts have already stopped beating.

One day, Edward received a note in a bleach white envelope with wax stamp on the back. It read as follows:

Dear Edward,
Don't panick. I am fine where I am and I am in good hands.
You must meet me at the North bridge at ten O'clock sharp.
Sincerely,
Angle

So many ideas buzzed in Edwards mind, but the only conclusion that he kept landing upon was Mick.
It was the only possible answer.
"Laugh like no one can hear you, dance like no one is watching, and love like you're going to doe tomorrow." --Unknown




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Yay! More! =D

Mick was a fourteen, short brown hair and amazing eyes.

Mick was a 14? So he was a giant number with eyes, arms, legs, and such? Haha. I don't think so. =P

but not Mick, his were Blue and

Since when is blue a proper noun? ;)

Waiter, can I have more detail on the fight please and thank you? *subtle hint* ;)

they have never seen or smelt him around.

Smelled*. There's only one word in the English language that ends in -mt: dreamt.

farther in their relation ship...

Relationship = one word.

Waiter, can I also have mor detail of what Edward and the angel were talking about? Thank you, and sorry to be such a bother.

Dear Edward,
Don't panick. I am fine where I am and I am in good hands.
You must meet me at the North bridge at ten O'clock sharp.
Sincerely,
Angle

One, this should really be in italics, to differentiate this from the rest of the narration. Also, panic* and angel*.

Your biggest flaw is still your lack of detail, which I've already pointed out to you, so I won't bore you by repeating myself for no reason other than I have nothing better to do. xD

As always, PM me if you have any questions!
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Thanks for the all the reviews!
Chapter two will be here, hopefully, Friday!
shanan-cat!
"Laugh like no one can hear you, dance like no one is watching, and love like you're going to doe tomorrow." --Unknown



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