My Poem

i wish we could hold hands
dance in a cirlce
kiss me
i love you

hey wat hapened 2 my title??????

I'm guessing a mod killed it. How many exclamation marks did you need?

I fixed the title of your poem. Two things: Don't use all caps as your title and one exclamation point would be sufficient, "!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!" is just obnoxious. Please take a look at the Rules & Guides.

A couple more things: Please do not use chatspeak (i.e. if your tagline). We are a writing site and we uphold a standard for our members to write in proper English. Do not comment on your own poems or beg for critiques. It's just bad nature.

Also, capitalize the letter "i" as it is a proper noun. Also might want to add some punctuation here. "cirlce" is "circle". Mostly the poem is just words, no feelings...no connections. It's not enough to make the reader want to read it again. You have to make an impact...have to be orginal.

Good luck!

I'm not going to crit this. That you made a typo in such a short poems betrays that put no time, care of love into this poem. Critting it would be a waste of my time, and doubtlessly would be lost on you. Write something - put time, effort and love into it - and I'll crit that instead.

just because my poem isnt lyk urs and u dont lyk it doesnt mean u have 2 b so mean about it!!!!! my poems r just diferent

Can we please banhammer this guy? I've just been looking over his other posts, and I really think he deserves the banhammer.

tis is the bigest piece of **** ive ever seen b4 in my life!

ike ur oter piece tis is ****! 'curdled moonlight'? how can moonlight b curdled? and how can pine trees be dusky?

omg u r lyk not a vry gud writer.

tis is so long why wuld any1 ever read teh whole thing?!!!!!!

I say again: No Chatspeak!

You have to take harsh comments as they are. If you don't want a critique then why are you posting it? If you don't want others opinions then this site is not for you.

Take harsh commets? He's been calling other people's work '****' and insulting them.

Okay. I will look into it. *Locked*