Our Last Kiss

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I have to agree with Cade, this is a dairy entry!
Why would we care!?

Still, its well written..
Try harder next time.

*keep rockin!*

-Meg

MERG
People say dieing hurts, but who alive knows?

Guy: Suck it up!
Girl: I'm sorry I don't suck it up, I bleed it out!




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When I stare at it, I just see a big chunk of boring words.

You have to put this in nice stanzas so people won't go and conclude that this is a boring poem, okay?

But the message of your poem was simply amazing. I can feel your emotions. It is interesting. But when you chop this up, this would be very interesting.

Good job! Keep it up. The best poems ever written comes from within.

~Casey the AWESOME
Christianity is not a religion, it's a relationship.

I may not be perfect but Jesus thinks I'm to die for.

"Let's destroy these little darlings..."- W.Beckett




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Oh my. I think you just put my exact feelings into a poem about my breakup.
Buh-Bye!




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so much emotion .To capture this and have such beautiful rhymes .Manufique!
Pour your heart out to a pen and Paper,You'll find that sometimes there the Only ones who understand.


-Me,Amira Got YWS!



The first draft is a trip to the amusement park. The next drafts are returning there as a safety inspector.
— SunsetTree