Ending Light (intro)

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It Begins…

”He asked me to tell him everything, I did not see the point with it but the gaze he gave me made all the memories come flying back, back to the time when I lived with my mother and siblings.
Yilan, yes that’s what we called mother for, although she hated to be called mother or mom since it made her feel old and ancient, which she however was, though when I spoke up about her age, I often ended up being slapped, even if the pain quickly ended I still began to hate her more for each day that passed.
Yilan always told us we had no father, that we were to ugly and stupid to have a father, she said we even were to foolish to have a mother. If I should be honest, I knew Yilan was not my mother, sometimes I prayed that the kind woman Olma at Yilan’s work was my mother. She always gave me food if I was hungry, however Olma just ended up being like an older sister to me.
My two siblings: Tuv and Jisk, oh how I loved them over anything else. Tuv was my older brother who always protected me and Jisk from any harm, he was not strong neither beautiful but he was one of the few people I actually cared about. Tuv however had one weakness, the same weakness as Yilan, he was in love with the seductive taste for alcohol. He drank often, but never got violent or angry, just plain stupid.
Jisk was my younger sister who I had always been jealous on, she had blond beautiful hair that fell perfectly down to her waist, curly as a snake who flee from it’s predator. Sadly she did not speak to often because of an terrible accident that took place when she was five years old, she fell… so very hard and all of her teeth but one tooth still remain in her hollow mouth. Her cries still echoes in my head sometimes, she cried every single night, and wrote on the walls in her tiny room how ugly she saw herself as. But to me she will always be the most beautiful girl I have ever seen.
I have to admit though that the times my family spent together was quiet joyful sometimes, so many tears shed but also so much laughter and happiness. I was pleased with my life until the day I turned sixteen, I was home alone, waiting for Yilan to come home, she had promised me a nice gift, something shiny and beautiful. I don’t remember for how long I watched the shadows grow, but when I began to slumber into dreamless sleep I heard a scream and I knew it was Yilan, even before I truly listened.
That night, Jisk and Tuv was taken from me, I was left alone… Yilan also vanished, where to I did not know, I did not even care. It was that night They came, and took me to a new place, took me to the life I now choose to live.”

We come at night when no one see, We hid from the sun when the moon fade.
We steal your soul, We take your life.
We only live to take what you hold dear.
We come when no one see, We seal the deal with no shame.
We are They.

“Deep inside of me I knew that this was wrong, what we did was so very wrong, but I did not have the strength to stop, to leave my friends… I had friends.”

Rynalis Tevon’li.
Last edited by Jen_Li_Ha on Mon Jan 21, 2008 5:39 pm, edited 1 time in total.




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:smt055 wow..... I loved it. There's something about it that I need to have more of. This is something I would exspect to read out of a book. MORE MORE!!! I MUST HAVE MORE!!!!




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Well, I was having trouble reading this, but I'm sure it mostly was because it is late here. Anyway, it was a nice beginning. I was kind of confused about whether it was some one speaking because of the quotation mark at the beginning. I'm pretty sure that if there are paragraphs in someone's dialogue, you should put a quotation in front of every new paragraph.




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souldier, I must admit I don't really understand what you mean, because the thing is, there's one person telling this little "story" a flashback, that's why I only used quotations in the beginning of the text and in the ending.

But please do tell me if I got you wrong, it would help alot since english ain't my "main language" :wink:

Oh and also thanks Maki-Chan, I appriciate your words :D perhaps it will come more :roll: (ofc it will!)
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