Order of the Archaeologist Prologue

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Prologue



February 19, 2008

It’s my first archaeological excavation fresh out of college. We’re in Mexico in a village that is a few miles away from a bog where a lone tower was discovered peeping above the treetops. However, this tower should not be here. It is not of Mayan or Aztec design. What’s even more curious is the fact that we have never found this type of rock anywhere on Earth.

I was very surprised when they contacted me. I mean I just got my Bachelor’s degree, and I haven’t been on any excavations or digs in my life. However, I am still Zach the Great… translator. I am one of the few on the team that can speak Spanish fluently. That’s why I was put in the village to ask around instead of actually at the excavation. However, I plan on going to the site to report what I’ve discovered.

I had asked almost everyone in the town about the tower. Most said that they had been to that bog before and have never seen that tower before. However, I stumbled upon a man who also said that, but he also said much, much more. He said that he had been to the bog before, and the tower had never been there. Until one day, a good foot of the tower was sticking out of the bog. He, then, visited it everyday and watched it “grow” about a foot a day until it stopped “growing” about two weeks ago. I may not be an astrophysicist, but I do know that’s not normal.
It doesn't think, doesn't feel.
It doesn't laugh or cry.
All it does from dusk 'till dawn
is make the soldiers die




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Interesting beginning, I'd like to see where you go with this.

We’re in Mexico in a village that is a few miles away from a bog where a lone tower was discovered peeping above the treetops.


Mention the bog and the tower in a second sentence, you don't have to pack it all together in one.

I stumbled upon a man who also said that


Drop the word 'also' out of that sentence, it doesn't belong.

Until one day, a good foot of the tower was sticking out of the bog.


This seems a little awkward, you should either remove the comma or follow it with 'when a good foot...'

He, then, visited it everyday


You don't need the commas here.

-Billy
He had decided to live forever or die in the attempt. - Yossarian, Catch-22

Wide-eyed stupid.

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