Southerners=Slow

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In the city of Atlanta,
The simplest game of hide-and-seek,
Turns into murder

He asphyxiates underground,
He’s an unsolved mystery
In a city where no one has answers

Everyone knows southerners are slow.

We call it I-20 East and
Getting back to Conyers,
May just take all evening.

We don’t talk,
We barely breathe
In a sea of cars, no one speaks,
Sitting still gripping a leather bar

We have complicated the simple art of
Breathing by suffocating ourselves

And everyone knows southerners are slow.
when there's nowhere to go, it's time to grow up.




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I understood the literal meanings, but, I couldn't tell what you were trying to get through here.

I looked at this, because I hate it when people make fun of the South. Me being from Alabama, I've heard enough of it. Had you not been a Southerner yourself, Chevy, this crit would have been a jumble of cursing and ranting.

But, yeah, I understood it, I just didn't ... unsderstand ... it ...?




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I agree with ohhewwo, I unterstood but I didn't unterstand it...
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Eh, it was pretty good. Wasn't great, but it was amusing in my opinion.
You had some good stanzas and words, but it could use some work...
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ohhewwo wrote:I looked at this, because I hate it when people make fun of the South. Me being from Alabama, I've heard enough of it. Had you not been a Southerner yourself, Chevy, this crit would have been a jumble of cursing and ranting.


I am not a southerner. AGHHHH!!!!
when there's nowhere to go, it's time to grow up.



Remember when dad's shoulders were the highest place on earth and your mom was your hero? Race issues were about who ran the fastest, war was only a car game. The most pain you felt was when you skinned your knees, and good byes only meant tomorrow? And we couldn't wait to grow up.
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